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Children of Suicide

Raised in wrong
Bathed in blood
Biting, tearing, shredding
Devouring souls
The ones that couldn't hold on
Fearing nothing
Scorn them and pay
Your life they'll take
Killing for breathing
Killing for living
It's all they know
Death
Despair
Disease
They hold close to sorrow
And dwell on insecurities
Pain is their joy
It's all they know
All they've been taught
You never had a chance
Let them in
Don't deny the pain
They only love your fear
It gives them life
Feel it consume your greedy heart
Agonizing, bleeding, seething
Their pained faces haunt your dreams
And they chase you down
Rip you open and let the hate out
The darkness seizes you
You are becoming one of them
Blood lust and gore
Only your damned soul now
The shell of you lies on the floor
Feast with them
Lie low in the dark
The numbers are growing
Minuet by minuet
Another one down
Millions and millions
Many a frown
Children of Suicide
We all will be
Children of Suicide
Set me free.

Author notes

Er...I had this one comming to me all day in pieces...I'm still not quite sure about it.
Written July 23rd, 2005

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  • sadhe
    July 25, 2005
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    Let's kill each other..

    JUST GORGEOUS ...... I 'cant stand the pleasure in your poem If, I have to chosse a favorite part all I have to do is write the poem again ...is just marvellous ...Nina Hermosa...!


  • robert bolin
    July 23, 2005
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    Don't deny the pain
    They only love your fear
    It gives them life
    Feel it consume your greedy heart
    Brilliant and powerful the wholw poem just amazing
    Shakes up the thought of plotting death
    By the knife gun what ever just brlliant..


  • devils muse
    July 23, 2005
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    very lovely its wonderfull the emotion is perfect adn so is the flow continue to write
    - a lost and forgotton muse


  • XxPoetic DemisexX
    July 23, 2005
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    This reminds me of a song... it's very emotional!! I love it!! I especially like the part...
    Raised in wrong
    Bathed in blood
    Biting, tearing, shredding
    Devouring souls
    The ones that couldn't hold on


    Feel it consume your greedy heart
    Agonizing, bleeding, seething
    Their pained faces haunt your dreams

    and finally...

    The numbers are growing
    Minuet by minuet
    Another one down
    Millions and millions
    Many a frown
    Children of Suicide
    We all will be
    Children of Suicide
    Set me free.

    Very great write... it is very emotinal...
    some stanzas would streghthen the mood... fabulous!!
    monkey