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behind those eyes

I don't know what goes on behind those eyes, you never show yourself
I wonder what you want or think, who is it that you love,i want
it to be me, somewhere inside me i know that in you eyes you could
but,your scared that you really could fall deeply in love with
me knowing i could be who you want me to be, who you need me to
be,and much more,you well not give me that chance,why?
                                                                             Behind those eyes i know you wonder about me,i know you have and
still think about it, even if you don't show it,and i know you love
him, maybe i could be the one for you,i don't know.I can only wonder
what happens behind those eyes...

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I dont know what goes on behind those eyes, you never show yourself
Written July 22nd, 2005

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  • Eyemdabest
    July 22, 2005
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    In line 3 "...in you eyes you..." should the first you be a your?

    Okay enough griping. A truly remarkable expression of the feelings we all have at one time or another - "Am I the one? Is there another?" Thank you for expressing what we all wonder from time to time.


  • BattleOfBlood
    July 22, 2005
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    The eyes can be the gateway to the soul, so some people hide what is in them. You need to look closer, or stop trying. By stop trying you might find it easier to see what needs to be seen. Keep on writing.
    Blessed be,
    Lefay