On the long and lonely ride back home from the war he thought of all what happen,all the men he killed.On the long and lonely ride back home from the war he thought of all what happened,all the men he killed,all the wives and kids that would never get to see there dads or husbands aging because of him. He wondered what it would be like to see his kids,mom and wife again
thanking god that he was alive,and the driver was thanking him
for what he did for his country,and what he lost in the war
but, he was a man and said, it was just a little bet to give
to my country. as long as i get to see my family! He fell asleep
the driver woke him up he got of the bus, and found not but
land miles long,and and sign that said condemn, his home,family, and life was gone, he had no arm, no home, family or,life,and he walk away.......
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Written July 22nd, 2005
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I liked this actually. It showed a man going off into a situation where he was going to face violence and suffering, with his only hope being to see his family again. That of course is shattered when he sees them all to be gone, but then it seems like he knew somewhere inside of him that when he left they were going to be gone when he came back. Doesnt it seem that way? Keep on writing.
Blessed be,
Lefay -
promising
this piece of writing is quite interesting...
although it's careless in its spelling, & that's very annoying for me, because i like poems that are carefully and thoughtfully crafted.
this reads like a first draft. do you revise your poems? this is quite good, in my honest opinion, but it could be much better.
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awww..its great..so deep..great write hun
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