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Move On

Goodbye my friend
It doesn't mean the end
I have to move on
Before dawn
To start brand new
Maybe down another avenue
I just got to move on
I'm not running a marathon
I'm just spreading my wings
Not to be a puppet on a string
I got to move on
To see the dawn
I'll be back
Hopefully on the right track
I got to move on

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Written July 22nd, 2005

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  • cherche -d -ame
    March 25, 2007

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    I always enjoy rhyme that seems so unintentional and not forced[I myself can not do rhyme] but I can appreciate the talent of someone that can. This writes seems personal, almost regret in leaving and goodbye, but the hope of a return after maybe broadening horizons remains opened. I laso like the "upbeat" tone of this
    reenie


  • Sonja
    June 24, 2006
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    Short but nice written and good flowing verses: Maybe they are very personal but with nice expressed feelings and great message. I wish you a lot of luck with your poetry. You have a great poetic strenght. Just spread your wings and show it to us.
    ~Sonja~


  • June 16, 2006
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    Excellent

    This is a very well written and heartfelt poem, Hawkeyes . Keep up with the great work.

    Cheers
    Terry