The sky was dark,
but the moon shone bright.
You came towards me,
as you turned off the light.
Shadows fell across your face,
as I laid across my bed.
You smiled your perfect smile,
and I remember what I said.
"Do you want to do this,
"because I know that I do."
You smiled again,
and told me you did too.
It happened so fast,
the pain came on so strong.
"I don't want to hurt you",
but it didn't last long.
Then it finally ended,
when you shook and you came.
If I only knew then,
that you didn't feel the same.
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Giggling Girl loves Silly Goose
Written July 22nd, 2005
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What a sad rendition of the same old song... Leave it to those unfeeling, young, full of themself, jerks to mar yet another experience that should be beautiful...
Good write, only change I'd make is S3, L2.. use "lay" instead of "laid"...
God Bless,
~Diane -
wow it iz so well writen. but the ending is sad, wad can u do ppl are like dat, hope itz not from ur own experience n if it iz hmm life iz very strange one moment u in love next u arguin well thx 4 enterinn gd luck
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ohh this is a good write, but the ending was sad
im sorry if this is from personal experience. it suks to give something that specail away to some one who doesnt feel the same. anyway, this was a really good write. thank you so much for entering, and good luck!
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