I haven't seen my family in over two years,
War dragging on, trying to survive the blood and tears.
My feet are blistered from walking all those miles,
Grim determination on our faces, no more smiles.
Following in the footsteps of the ones who went before,
Hunger gnawing on my insides, I can't take much more.
No guts no glory is what we were told,
Sounds good when you're not hungry and cold.
I made a vow to my wife I would make it back alive,
Put one foot in front of the other and try to survive.
One more battle another blood soaked farm,
Just doing what we must, inflicting harm.
Disgusted with everything down to the rags on my feet,
Just want to go home but I keep marching to the drum beat.
I will return to my home, I made a solemn vow,
Rivers are running blood red, I will make it somehow.
Thoughts of going home are what is getting me through,
For now I will endure and do what i must do.
Author notes
This is about the civil war, the troops many times didn't even have proper food or clothing. Surviving on pure guts and determination.
Written July 21st, 2005
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A contest entry
- PARTNERS IN CRIME 4th of JULY CONTEST by Partners In Crime.
650 points, ended July 15, 2008, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow mate this is soooooo damn sad and it does make me wonder if our governments really give a toss about our troops, i don't think so and it's saddening. You've written this extremely well, the imagery was really raw and out there.
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Excellant poem about the civil war but could be about any war...same thoughts, same fears, same everything ...only the location and time is different...will it never end! Good job and good luck...Darlene
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Excellent write
I just wonder how many today realise just how big a price has been paid over the years so that we can have the freedom we enjoy today.
This is an excellent written poem I enjoyed reading it very much.
Thank you for the entry and good luck in the contest.
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A very good poem, Barb... reading it gives the feeling of having been there, doing what had to be done and with the promise of returning home. And a little slice of history, too.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Great poem from our point of view. Have you deployed?
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the madness of war, it may seem glamourous at times but it is far from that if you are there in the thick of it all. a good poem
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This is good.
I like you use of rhyming.
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A very nice write. Filled with imagery, and emotion.
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This is a very nice write, it had a good flow and had the power to hold me--well done and good luck!. shaz xx
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very emotional i felt my throat thicken
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I will have to agree that this was hit out of the ball park for a home run....you have caputure all the readers and brought them exactly to that time and place to feel all of the raw emotion going on....this was a good write and I enjoyed reading it....good luck.
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Through battle, we still will survive. A great write with and inspiring message at the end. Wonderfully written and I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing it.
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Powerful Write!
A great lesson in history depicting the anguish of the civil war era and how the people struggled to survive. This is what I consider versatility, you can write about any topic you choose. I admire that quality and I adored this poem for it's visual and mental images.
Avril
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War it kind of makes me sick to turn on the TV and hear about another man or woman that wont be coming back to their familys,but I cant just hear the words you say in this poem said to each loved one left behind waiting and hopeing for their return,very good poem and I wish you luck in the contest. .Doris.
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Absolutely wonderful poem
me
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This is superb Queen, your words were echoing in my chest as i was imaganing those troops with not much clothing and hungry. It's a wonderful piece, but very sad also.
A brilliant write my friend as always
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girl,you took me there.it was so vivid for me that i knew it was the civil war before i read your author's comments.the rags on their feet,i could see them.yes,where is the screenplay for this.this is glory in poetic form.you are the queen and i bow to you.
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Yeah, I will have to remember this when I finish up my story that is based during the Civil War. But this is great i enjoy reading historical poems so I really enjoyed this one. Keep it up thanks for sharing. God luck in the contest
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This is amazing I got lost sevral times reading it - it seems as if this was potraid to the civil war because of the words you used about the rags upon the feet - any ways this was just amazing and I liked it a lot thank you for letting me read your poetry..
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This is such an emotional poem, it dragged me along on that march right from the start! I like the rhythm, it really works well and the imagery is great!
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Fantastic! This is solid hun! I think you have captured this scene well and with great meaning! Flawless flow as well. Bravo! Hugs, Gypsy
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Ms Queen, you have captured the soldiering plight well, particularly the mental pain and the straggle to survive the senseless. Very clinical - thank you.
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excellent~
You have written a poem that I could just envison hun
I agree it needs to have a sequel me thinks you think about doing one...the imagery in this was simply amazing and thank you for sharing this wonderful poem
I just posted a new one too come on over when ya have time
Hugs
Susan~~~
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This is amazing. Truly inspirational. We learned about this in school in 8th grade, and it made me so sad. It definitely makes me think about things, espeically with what's going on today too and how much worse it was back then. Excellent poem!
Kelsi
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Beautiful
xxx the rhyming never seemed forced xxx pup
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Wow!!! This needs to have a sequel!!
A novel!!! A MOVIEEEEEEEEeeeeee!!!!
Can you tell I love this? Awesome
me
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