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balding butterfly

You hand me the scissors,
and tell me to be creative,
it's not my fault if you end up with a butterfly on your head.

i cut your hair,
i cut it short,
i'm happy 'cause you like it.

Now I'm gonna dye it!

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Written July 21st, 2005

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  • Blazing White Wolf
    July 23, 2005
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    this is not bad I would suggest making the i's to I's
    and make this into two lines I think it would flow better
    it's not my fault if you end up
    with a butterfly on your head
    overall nice imagary with the little words used
    love and light
    blaze


  • justin d-
    July 21, 2005
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    .. What a work of art right here! *claps*