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To the sister i hate

(to my sister)
Do you ever just feel dead?
like theres nothing cheerful that could be said?

Do you ever want to let go?
like theres no more light in your life to glow?

Don't look at me
cant you see?

do you have no mind or are you just blind?
I want to let go of you

theres nothing else you can do
You hurt me so much when all that stuff aimed at me you threw

in everything you do
i mean we are threw!

i hate you
i hate you

i hope you die
maybe then when you hurt me
you wont lie! (to mom)

Get out of my life
you bring all this strife

Look at our family its horrid
and it makes us all look morbid

I wish you could at least go to an orphanage to stay
then maybe that will be the way you shall pay

I hope you could learn how much you hurt me
and that no matter every time i come home waiting for someone to greet me
from your temper I'll never be free!

Author notes

..........................................................................................................................so i dont like my sister so what?.....................................................................................................................
Written July 20th, 2005

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  • Swordman
    July 20, 2005
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    Heh, 13 and 16 are not mature ages, I was more talking about when you're both in your 20s, when she'll stop bugging you, and you'll finaly be mature enugh to forgive her. Im 16 myself, and I'm still having a lot of trouble forgiving my sister for her bossy, everything has to go her way, attitude.


  • Xx Thorn xX
    July 20, 2005
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    thanks but i am 13 and shes 16 its kidna immature shes into counseling for hurting me *sigh*


  • Ladylove1968
    July 20, 2005
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    Yes someday when you are both older you might be the best of friends. Meanwhile keep writing and letting the anger out it
    really helps. Hang in there.

  • Swordman
    July 20, 2005
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    Well, I think you used a bit of forced rhyming, which isn't so great, but I still felt that sense of anger from this poem. I was never so big on my sister either, but realy, as you grow you tend to either grow apart enugh so that it doesn't matter, or grow so that you both are mature enugh to not bother each other. Dont worry, the best is still to come.