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Where The Moonbabies Meet

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Sing in thoughtless patterns
Let the melodies repeat,
Dance until collapsing
Where The Moonbabies meet.

Spin around in circles
Lift off the cold and lonely street.
Find your hope and find composure
Where The Moonbabies meet.

On the wings of imagination
Soars our fearless, flying fleet
Painting rings of possibilities
Where The Moonbabies meet.

Join the thinker's paradise
Join the magical elite,
You're invited to the party
Where The Moonbabies meet.

Listen very closely
And you too, will hear the beat
That echoes loudly through the cosmos
Where The Moonbabies meet.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

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  • MissStranger
    July 19, 2006
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    I'm so proud to be part of this group of talented poets!


  • Anthony-
    July 22, 2005
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    I was just singing in the same way you have described in your first line which freaks me out a little bit. I love this write. It is brittle and full of bones if that makes any sense. Tony.


  • silver bugs
    July 22, 2005
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    Oh, this makes me want to join that group right now! And I think I will, once I beat my writers block. What a playful write, beautiful, peaceful and truly wonderful. I enjoyed the rhyming, which is very hard to master...And you did it perfectly while still making this poem absolutely stunning. I applaud you. Keep it up.
    ~Lana


  • Freedom
    July 21, 2005
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    Amazing piece! (great joice for a featured!) I loved reading this poem, it took me off on an adventure I've always tried to take myself on. I can't explain how much I enjoyed this piece.
    Thank you
    Freedom


  • ImJustALostMemory
    July 21, 2005
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    great

    I really enjoyed this! Thanks for sharing it! and i lovve how it ryhmes and the flow is oh so nice and the words just fit together so beautiful! Wonderful write! I'll be sure to check out your other writing's!
    <3
    JiGgLeZ


  • HeMeansNothingToHer
    July 21, 2005
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    I love the mmon. So, I really enjoyed this poem. It was VERY good. I hope to read more like this. You are very talented. Keep up the good writing. I'll check out your page later!!! Good write.

    <3 Hoochie

    ****************************************************************

    I'm Fallon's Hoochie. Don't know it? You better! Love for the Hooch and Hoochie. We are the chicks for life. Nothing will break us. We have started something that will never end. What a great beginning. I love you Hooch!

    ****************************************************************


  • ricochet rabbit
    July 21, 2005
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    I liked: the metre and rhyme. That was pretty impressive. I have to say that you have a pretty good understanding of how that works.

    I disliked: the repetition of the last line in every stanza. To me, because it is repeated too often, it loses its punch. It becomes automatic.


  • BeautifullyxTragic
    July 21, 2005
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    this is an awesome poem!

  • honeybe
    July 21, 2005
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    nice write. kinda comferting. keep it up. later Honeybe


  • Fate
    July 21, 2005
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    Fantastic

    Beautifully written,

    Fanciful and kept my attention all the way through!


  • PsydewaysTears gold member
    July 21, 2005
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    I'm attempting to collect them (poems about the moon) in the group list for "Where The Moonbabies Meet" and have a fair few so far. Thanks for the awesome comment!


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    July 21, 2005
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    Children will love it.

    The periods didn't bother me at all but it might give it a better flow to take them out. I have a moon poem (Moon Songs) and I think I have spotted some others. Perhaps we should group them somehow.
    This is playful and teasing. "Moon babies is an intriguing concept. Children would love the poem, and think of the art possibilities! Sorry that I have used up my applause indicators.

  • TeddyBear45
    July 21, 2005
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    Awesome

    that is so good....great job, its like ur describing happiness!!


  • Freakanzoy
    July 21, 2005
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    Wow ! Awesome poem, I liked the flow and imagery you used. The words fit all really well together
    Keep up the good work
    Laury


  • SeptemberFaith
    July 21, 2005
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    This was very cute. It flowed very well and made me feel a lot of peace. It is a very relaxing and special write.

    I see you have a group too, I am going to go and see what it is all about.

    Criss


  • Br0ken21
    July 21, 2005
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    great write

    very good flow,great rhythym and rhyme,i have to agree. you did a wonderful job with this!!!

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    July 21, 2005
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    Gorgeous writing as usual. Perfect rhythm and rhyme and a subject that is both adorable and touching. Now, I am off to find out what the link is that you gave... Curiousity always gets me!

    Great write and best wishes... ~genielassie~


  • MelodiousMe
    July 19, 2005
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    I LOVED IT IT WAS FANTASTIC!!!!!! VERY VERY VERY GOOD...i liked the first verse the best


  • On-Borrowed-Time
    July 19, 2005
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    awww, it's cute. kind of has a dr. suess feel to it, but with a little more maturity. loved the flow of it and the concept. great job and thanks for the read!

    ~ryan


  • DarkenedDreams
    July 19, 2005
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    This is a very good poem..... I would want you to change the poem a little by taking some of the periods out and maybe put some.... commas or just leave some of the lines without a period or comma after each line.... that is all I have..... other wise your poem is good..... keep on writing.

    Forever tiger

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