Trying to keep my head up through all this confusion I just don't know what to do anymore you know?
It's like it all falls on me once, and there's nothing I can do to stop it, except maybe breath deep and keep my goals low.
You apologized for leading me on, but what you did was give me the courage to tell you how I felt, the truth.
It was like something leaked out of me, when I told you, like I removed an infected tooth.
That night I confessed all my sins to you, you shot me a look that made me shiver, and cry at the same time.
It wasn't the fact that I maybe thought that you felt the same way, it was the moment, the reason, the rhyme.
When I was just giving up, you asked, or more like suggested, that I take you on a date...just to see.
Oh, and in my mind's eye, I saw, us at least, being a couple. You being you, me being me.
All I wanted to do was make you happy, make you like me.
I thought you were superficial, but you told me otherwise.
What I want and what you need are two different things, and I realize that, but my impatience is my demise!
So all I really want to say is: If you love me, I'll love you too...
The simply irresistible you.
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What happens to me when I feel something about a guy...
Written July 19th, 2005
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yeeeeaaaaaahhhhhh!!!! for one awful minute i thought it was going to have a horribly sad ending but it didnt yeah!oh t was so nice who wouldnt want to be the simply irrisitable you
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Corey...it rhymes. It's in free-rhyme. That's what I like to call Jeric's style, because it's as if I'm talking normally, but rhyming.
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I do have a question though... did you write this with any kind of form? Or are you just freestyling with it? The way it is written looks (from a glance) like it is written in some sort of form.. I havent taken the time to count syllables and rhyme schemes... but It looks nice..
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Spank you very much sir.
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LoL! I know the feeling.. I havent been on in a month or two... But yeah, theres really nothing left to be said besides keep it up man... keep it up...
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I didn't even know you commented on my poem till three days later. I am SO on top of things! lol Thanx for the comment!
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Haha Thank you. Blessed day to you too I spose. lol
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This is a rather good piece you have here.I have had similar situations in the past and the way you have written this is brilliant.You caught a situation alot of persons experienced,
it was good keep it up.Have a blessed day. -
Very emotional, very real, and very well done. this was an excellent poem.
~Tina -
What do I say? Pure raw emotions, right out the box of loves agony... I feel you. Much love Jeric, and good lucks.
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