I have decided to never trust again
I am giving up…I’m letting you win
I let you in, something I never do…
Only to realize, you will hurt me too
I thought I could give my suicidal thoughts a rest
Then reality hit like a bullet to the chest
It turns out I was wrong
You were messing with my head all along
She is trying to mess things up for you and me
Are you blind? Or are you just to dumb to see?
She doesn’t want you, and she doesn’t care
She is only trying to get with you, because I’m not there
Maybe you won’t break my trust
Or, maybe you’ll give in to lust,
Maybe the drugs that get you high
Will show you, if you do this, another part of my soul will die.
The last thing I wish to say
Is I liked you more and more each day
But if that lust some how does win,
Don’t worry, because you’ll never see my face again.
Author notes
I actually trusted him...and I actually liked him....why do I do this to myself?
Written July 18th, 2005
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This is great, I can relate...good write
~Britney -
I'm at that point right now in my life. Been trampled on one too many times, never again. Boys are heartless
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wow that was intense sweet and hateful all in one broken trust is really horrible thing to deal with I am glad you saw through the denial....peace
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this was amazing.
Chelsea Kay -
hey, im gonna be totally honest...as thats what i expect from commenters on my work...I personally think that you would write much better if you didnt focus on rhyming the lines as i personally feel it makes poems seem trival and not meaningful although i can tell that you are writing about something that imortant to you and i think that your focus is great and moving. i realy hope that your not offened.
I.I -
they say love is blind...maybe u love him and you didnt see or didnt want to see that he was doing this to you becuase of all the positive qualities he has. its just life that we are fooled so dont let this bring you down girl. good luck to you in the future and great poem as well.
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i'm sorry
i'm very sorry for your pain, i know wat that feels like..it sux!I loved your poem and if you want you can IM me anytime you wish, i'll be there for you.
Alea -
short and sweet
this is so sad... hope you find some1 else better than that. great write. it was very simple and easy 2 relate 2. -
The last thing I wish to say
Is I liked you more and more each day
But if that lust some how does win,
Don’t worry, because you’ll never see my face again.
An excellent way to end this sad poem. I know exactly how you feel in this, for I've trusted and been burned many times. Your emotions were expressed so well and the pain for the deceiving. Wonderful job on this and thank you for sharing it. -
this is a prfound piece you have delievered to us on the canvas . your imagery is glittering with the images of the emotions that are dripping from your pen. Trust is such and abandoment and broken promises is equally such a waste! I wish you well..take a peek at my piece "ypu" this one you have delivered reminds me somewaht of it!
ICUlookn
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I think you did this because you loved him and where blinded by it. I myself have just gone through the same thing. It is true in a lot of men (not all) that they only wish to please their sex desire, while females wish to be loved whole heartedly and don't see sex as the main element in a relationship. Your lover must have seen this other person as a way to get some sort of sexual desire full filled, perhaps something you weren't willing to do. But I say don't give into his need for sex, and you should wait and find a guy that could love you for you not the sex you could give him. BUT a thats just me. Your poem was a great expression of your broken trust. Great job and keep up the good work.
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Yeah, I hear ya. If it makes you feel any better, a LOT of us fall into this trap. You're certainly not alone in it. And I felt the deep level of despair and even desperation that was running through this piece like wild fire, bringing into bright light, your pain. Or so is what I got from it. So on that note, I'll say you expressed yourself just fine.
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I love this poem. It has shows great emotion, and captures how mindless some boys can be. Great write.
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this is so angry and bitter. i LOVE it.
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its easy to put yourself in this situation for someone you so truly like. However, if you never take a chance and trust, ou lose out on so much. Each failed time is a lesson to help you in the future. I really enjoyed this poem, but I'm sorry you are so sad....... good luck -
I liked: the personalness of this piece. It feels like you are opening up a piece of your life. This is a good thing, as it creates intimacy with your readers.
I disliked: the forced rhyme. At times, it feels you are rhyming just to rhyme. I don't think you should ever allow a poetic device to overtake the content of your poem. "When in doubt, leave it out". -
Aww! I'm sorry! I hope he stayed with you! I know how you feel! I've been through heartbreak! He probably didn't deserve you anyway! You're a great writer and this poem was somehthing out of this world! Wonderful job, and stick in there, I know from experience, it'll pass if it hadn't already, if so, I'm just making an idiot of myself. Okay...I'll shut up now! Keep on writing! You're really good!
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awww. ashley. tell him how you really feel. has he read this yet. well you need to send it to him. bc if you really feel this way he needs to know.but you never know he might feel the same way. he might actully like you for you and not what everyone else thinks he wants you know. but give it a try and things might work out. ok again. lol great write i just love your writes but then they make me sad lol. but keep it up. love ya. ttyl
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ah, you poor thing. this poem has pathos, but needs to be more concise. unless it was just therapy, whereas - i hope it worked!
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awww hun this was really sad, I am sorry to hear that you are going through this. I hope things get better for you
Nice poem i liked it alot xxx Blonde Ambition ooo
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ohhh, I am so sorry my sweet. The only answer I have for you is that men suck, that's the reality. I'm the same, I find it really hard to trust someone, then when i finally let them in, they screw me over in one way or another. I know that there are men out there who don't do this, but I have yet to find one, lol. Don't let it get you down too much, it's not your fault.
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Lady~
it sucks to be hurt but that's life don't give up how many times did i tell you i waas hurt and we talked and i never gave up? Now i'm going out with a great guy. Come on babe head up ok? Nice write by the way, you get more and more talented every time i read your work. Keep it up
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Wow this is very very good! I know how you feel too. Maybe not exactly how you feel but I have an idea. See, I dont have good luck when it comes to friendships, at all. Every "best friend" I get just picks up and leaves me. After the last one I promised myself that was it, I would no longer trust anyone again. Well, because I"m stupid, I have and I'm scared to death that he is going to hurt me. He knows he is all I have, without him I have no reason to live. I hope everything turns out ok for you, you have a great talent and I don't want anything to happen to you. Your work should be shared as long as possable. Great job! This is really good and just how I feel. You are an amazing writter.
mel
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I loved this.Wonderful work of yours
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your emotions were put into this poem in a way that really got to the reader-good job on that. I think that there are a few lines in this poem that are a bit cliche', and maybe reading through and changing some of those would make this improved...I really did enjoy reading it though! I liked the message...the meaning expressed through your words..great job!
Amanda -
nice words thatb hold alot of truth
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very good poem for showing how your feel about this person.
you must really care about him of love him,but keep up the good work.
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