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Requited Vow

Your scars remind me of a past you went through,
a past that you suffered,
a past I helped you through.
For now you're fine, for now you're safe.
But here's the catch...
Where was my thank you?

I felt what you felt,
saw what you saw!
I have some scars from the past,
I supported you through.

(Let you get too close, let you abuse me)
You pushed me, walked away,
yet still, I gave you my all once,
twice, and many times before.

Now you're back again,
on your hands and knees,
pleading for help.
I'm sorry, but this time,
I can't let you get the best
(The best of me)

Chorus:
Here's the reason,
the reason for not helping you.
When you put up walls around you
for those who try to help you,
you leave me attempting to break through
these barriers.
This leaves me weak,
this leaves me torn between right and wrong,
and frankly, the whole ordeal makes me weary.
(Rp. 2x)

I said some things I thought I meant,
like how I'd be there forever for you,
no matter the event.
But you're crossed the line,
and I'm regretting to say,
That I need to say goodbye.
(This is my requited vow.)

Author notes

Woo. o.o I broke my writer's block...I think. o___o Yay. <3
Written July 18th, 2005

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  • ChicaneryInc
    July 20, 2005
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    I dunno. I forget. -shrug-


  • Faithless Slave
    July 20, 2005
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    Typo where? Hey, no problem. Are you doing anything this weekend?

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 19, 2005
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    OMG...Typo! *goes to correct it* <3 Thanks Jess.

  • Faithless Slave
    July 19, 2005
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    Excellent

    Wowness. -Drowned by teh goodness of this poem- Keep it up, Pysco Squirrelly.

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 18, 2005
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    Thanks

  • XonethousandxtearsX
    July 18, 2005
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    Great

    hey this was great! i really liked it! Missy

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 18, 2005
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    ...Primped...is that even a word?

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 18, 2005
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    Hahaha. Burst of inspiration. o.o I came across an old poem I was working on, and I primped it up a bit. ^_^


  • I Hope You Choke
    July 18, 2005
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    yes you did!!!!!!!!! congrats to you. I've never seen anyone plow over a block like that-- and with flying colors too!!! ^_^

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 18, 2005
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    Thank you! ^_^ <3


  • Shadowed Stars
    July 18, 2005
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    Good job, it's hard to find a poem with a good beat. Reminded me of a few people I know. Great work!

  • ChicaneryInc
    July 18, 2005
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    ^_^ Thank you for the applause.

  • daisychainprincess
    July 18, 2005
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    yay for broken writers block
    i love it

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