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It Ain't Over Yet Apparently

I had a dream last night
And you were in it
Never properly had a dream about you before
I was on the phone to you
And after a while you were in my bedroom
We were laughing together, you were flexing your muscles
I couldn't help but giggle
You lay across my bed, I sat on the floor in front of you
You looked so cute, lying there, smiling at me
You kissed my head gently with your soft lips
I closed my eyes, revelling in the sweetness
I reached up to return the kiss
Kissing from your forehead to your chin
I reached your lips
You pulled me back when I left them
We tasted each other
I remember the feeling in my stomach when our tongues met
We drew closer and closer to each other...

Then it was over

We were walking along a darkened path
With your one
I jumped on your back playfully
She looked the other way
We disappeared from her view...

Author notes

About a dream I once had when I had feelings for someone my best friend was going out with... We ended up seeing each other behind her back, we told her, she fell out with us for a short time but the friendship was somewhat repaired after that. As for what happened with the guy, well that's a story for another time...

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  • LesbianOfLove silver member
    November 26
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    Nice job here, it seemed to jump to a conclusion a little too soon as if you rushed this a bit. But overall, pretty good. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you! Keep writing!


  • JenP
    July 21, 2005
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    Love the way you wrote this. Wonderfully done

  • rgrpaperboy
    July 20, 2005
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    Excellent poem and you did a great job in writing this poem. Good luck in the contest. Rick


  • agalford7053
    July 19, 2005
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    oh wow.. i like this.. it is good....you did great
    God Bless
    ~Ashley~