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Teardrops In The Rain

As the lightning flashes
I see in your eyes
The pain held inside
I see the tears through the rain
For raindrops don't land on eyelids
And brim to overflow
The tears falling slowly
But the rain is pounding hard
I see your body give shudder
But not to the cold.
Your shoulders, weak
Body too heavy to move
You sit back and embrace the storm
Emotions on overdrive
The sadness kicks in
You heave a sigh of grief
As the teardrops fall again and again.

Author notes

I know this isn't too great of a poem and it's not that long, but this is what I was able to come up with right off the bat.
Written July 17th, 2005

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  • Itsalie
    July 19, 2005
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    good

    I like the way you mimic the effects of the storm within the emotions of the person in your poem. Also that you are viewing it as narrator.

    Well written and thanks for your comment.
    Talia


  • July 18, 2005
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    For a quick write, it's very nice and emotional. I love the imagery, and I rather love the lines;

    "I see the tears through the rain
    For raindrops don't land on eyelids"

    Beautiful.