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Acid Black Tears

. . . . . .

Acid black tears fall into open wounds,
burning memories ontop of pale skin -
   Another scar of sorrow.

Heavy metal shakes in a clenched fist,
hugging a shaking hand like an old friend -
   Another mistake etched.

Echoes of rememberance flash like film,
a glittering past that will never be the future -
   Another love of lies.

. . . . . .

Author notes

I really need some tips on this, the first line of the last stanza *does* *not* seem to fit at all, any suggestions?
Written July 17th, 2005

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  • AsYetFaithless
    July 28, 2005
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    wow, chica, that's a really good poem. It's short, but that briefness, the fact that you can't (at least not me anyway) really be sure exactly what each line refers too, that's what gives it its power, and enables each reader to connect to it in their own way. A very powerful, emotional piece