lately I have been noticing
this unwanted change
I feel like we are slipping
in a irreversible way
you have been acting different
in the way you talk to me
like you can take me for granted
but I could be an absentee
you blow everything out of proportion
making it seem worse than what it is
but when it happens
you give me this long quiz
"why did this happen
were have you been
your such a whore
showing all that skin"
"you want boys to look at you
you do it on purpose
to make me look bad
you little whore, go wash off your face"
you have gotten so angry
like your possesed from within
some evil force controlling what you do
punching me across the chin
I cant speak unless spoken too
I'm forced to stay inside so as not to "be bad"
no matter what I answer to you
even when you come home a drunken old bag
when you come home worn out and tired
sex is a regular event
you climb on top of me, pushing inside and out of me
usually not being good enough leads to an argument
you slap me around and tell me what to do
but someday your going to be dead
I'm gonna come in while your sleeping
and put a bullet through your head
then we`ll see who's in control
when your lying on the floor begging for your life
and i laugh in your face and say
sorry, I'm just not a good wife
Author notes
this is not true but I feel like it is...weird I couldnt find nething to rhyme with purpose so if u have a better idea tell me and I will change it thanX!
Written July 16th, 2005
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ty I really wanted a new one! and I will use it!
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i like this one too, even though its not true u speak for many women in this position. o and i think that you could use the word 'worthless' to rhyme with 'purpose' if you like
. another good one!
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thank you missy I really really apprieciate that your words always hit me right in the spot!! lol only way to explain it but thanx
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This is great! I love the sarcasm at the end but my favorite part that keeps resounding in my head is :"you have gotten so angry
like your possesed from within
some evil force controlling what you do
punching me across the chin"
It's a beautiful piece. Keep writing hun! you'll be known everywhere one day. -
o grrl this is great. i like the story you knwo the whole thing was amazing and the end is jsut a big HAHA, now lets see who wear the pants- great job
~nerny -
Good Write!!
Very good write, i really enjoyed this write! Kepp up the good work!!!
Peace 'n' Love
Ellie -
wow... that would suck to have a husban like that, i would say fuck the shoting him, only cause i wouldnt want to go to jail for it, but devorise him in stead. i would kick him to the curb and tell him to stay out of my life, change all the locks on the doors! other than that thoughs are just my opinons. you did a really good job at writing this. you can feel the emotions radeat off of it. the hurt and anger, it's very strong in this piece. good job on exprecing them. the flow goes together well and the discription is good. good job! ~pixie~
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awesome
Well it was true for me. My ex was very abusive. I cant belive that you dont know from first hand. You hit it right on the nail. Brings back lots of painful memories to me but that is a good think. Makes me sure I dont want to ever go back. Thanks dor sharing, ~~Shannon~~ -
Oh my! You turned this one around on me! Very powerful ending. Nice images, and flow. I enjoyed this read.
~Dee -
It's hard to imagine this was written from imagination and not experience! Good job on developing such an emotional impact.
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I have been there...and if you are...get the fuck out NOW.
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This is a very powerful poem its 99 percent of the women in the world are being beaten by their husbands and called trashy names that they dont deserve - Think for a moment most women act on an impulse when push comes to shove they do what their called to get even - and then these guys beat them this worlds already gone to hell and my freinds the devils closing in on mankind..
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I hate guys that think they can tell you what to do.. how to dress, wear your hair, put on your makeup and push you around if they don't thnk that something is good enough..fuck them!
You are you and you should not have to change for any man, no matter how hot they are or what they say. -
thanx so much, no it did not happen to me, thank god but I appreciate your words..thank you for adding me!
<3 Lace -
i love this poem!! it completely symbolizes how women (or even men) of abuse will eventually reach their breaking point. I wonder how you came up with this idea of abuse. It's so real that i'm thinking that it actually happened to you, or to someone you know. Well, if it has, my apologies go out and if you ever need someone to talk to, i'm here. I'm adding you to my favorites.
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thanks sam, wow that makes me feel so good...aww...lol...luv u so how have u been lately eh? well I luv u bunches and thanx 4 the comment
<3 Lace -
I absolutely loved this!!!
"why did this happen
were have you been
your such a whore
showing all that skin"
These lines imparticular hit me hard. You did a wonderful job of making this seem as a real situation. You are definitely one hell of a talented poet. -
dreadful topic
there are some grammatical errors but that aside the description of the events and the thoughts surrounding them are clear and the message is convey, sad though it is. not bad. peace be w/ you
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