i looked up in the sky
and for some reason i don't know why
but i really needed to cry
i had not cried in so long, i felt empty inside
so empty i just wanted to die
and for so long my eyes remained dry
I'm not going to question this...i wont even try
just because today i finally got to cry
Author notes
this poem had to all rhyme with die and cry and all those for a contest, i tried....
Written July 16th, 2005
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you rhymed very well babes great write..
xxx
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a bit cliche
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whoa strong one. great poem really! it was nicely flowing and genuine- adoable work.
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Hahahahahha this is great. lol.
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i havent quite gotten there yet, but have gotten close before. great write, i love the rhyme ;]
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wow, I hate when that happens. All of a sudden you feel the need to cry. That happened to me not to long ago. Strange how it works. I connected with this quickly. I like it. Thank you for the comment on my poem. I'm going to read more of your work.
Tiffany
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Good
Great write, the flow was just awesome. Good luck with the poem and thanks for commenting on mine! -
thanks...i really appreciate it
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Short, straight to the point. A little bit of a cliche, but that is beside the point. It was great. I also like to just sit down and pick one word to rhyme a whole entire poem with. I have written many like this, and believe it or not, a lot of them have Die in it.
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I know exactly how all that feels. I can feel the emotion in the poem. Keep up the awesome work.!
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wow honey this rocks
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I liked it! Its nice and short, to the point! I can feel the emotions in your words. Nice job, keep up the good work!!
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this short but good.
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I know what it feels like to not be able to cry and the satisfaction you get when you finally do is undescribable
But something so simple as looking at the sky i dont even know what else to say I liked it -
i dont care what everyone says i still love it !!!!
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this doesnt ahve the word die in it hun, add it in and i can accept it x
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is that bad?
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