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How My Heartbeat Stopped

Thump, Thump... Thump, Thump... Thump, Thump

I know you're hurting
But please give me a chance
I'll show you the world
Without even leaving this place.

Thump, THUMP... Thump, THUMP... Thump, THUMP

This time spent with you
It makes me feel good inside
But something happened
Over Thanksgiving night.

THUMP, THUMP... THUMP, THUMP... THUMP, THUMP

I know it shouldn't have happened
It should never have gone this far
But I once loved her more
And we were parked outside in my car.

THUMP, THUMP THUMP, THUMP THUMP, THUMP THUMP, THUMP

It was only a little kiss
It wasn't suppose to go on
But temptation pulled me in
My heart said no, but my hormones won.

THUMP, THUMP.......... BREAK ..........THUMP, THUMP

I still love you some
But I love her the more
I'm giving her another chance
I'm sorry to leave you so sore.

THUMP, THUMP........... SHATTER ..........THUMP, THUMP
THUMP, Thump..... T-h-u-m-p, T-h-u-m-p..... T-h-u-m-p, T-h-u.....

Author notes

Ok.. well.. this just came to me.. This is suppose to be written as in my ex gf's point of view.. like she wrote it to me (only I'm the one who wrote it).  My ex gf and I were together for awhile and we ended up falling in love, but over Thanksgiving her ex gf came around and they ended up doing stuff together.  She told me that she'd never felt like she did for anyone else but her ex and wanted to give her another chance.  I hurt so badly that I thought I was going to die, but I didn't of course.  But the thumps are like... how I felt throughout the whole thing.  At the beginning my heart beat just fine, then she told me she fell in love with me and my heart sped up from joy.  Then the news came that she seen her ex and my heart beat really hard cause I didn't know what to do.  Then she broke the news to me and my heart sped up really hard and fast and it just felt like I couldn't breathe.  Then she told me that she was giving her another chance and that's when my heart broke and shattered and just stopped mid-beat....
Written July 15th, 2005

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  • Confused CRow
    July 28, 2005
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    hey. Thanx for entering my contest!

    this was a long poem. thank you! i liked how you put, thump, thump, thumps in it. unique. umm nice ryhming and stanzas. um this was a really good poem. thank you so much for sharing it. keep up the great work. im out l8erz

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  • -amykins-
    July 16, 2005
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    I like that you wrote from another person's perspective, you obviously are aware of how emotions control people. It's sad that you had your heart broken, but it seems that you are learning and taking inspiration from it. Unique style also, I like when people try their hand at something different.
    Good luck in my contest!
    Amy xx

  • troubled-love22
    July 15, 2005
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    great

    this is such a well written poem!!! i brings me to tears... mainly b/c i know the feeling... when you feel like someone stabbing you in the heart with a knife would feel better than what ur feeling at that very momment... loved the poem very sad yet very real!!
    ~Amber