Blood boiling for the slightest of reasons
unable to speak softer than a shout
turbulence in the calmest of seasons
tis the curse of wrath, there can be no doubt
Wrath is often born of righteous cause
but when over-fed becomes a greedy thief
that robs away peace, and the love of laws
and brings suffering, and woe, and pain ,and grief
Pity the man who's heart is hardened
who's judgement is clouded by anger's shade
for he lives in prison, and shall never be pardoned
who holds on to a debt that cannot be paid
Author notes
this piece is about (what else?)anger
Written July 14th, 2005
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righteousness isnt always gentle. Remember how Jesus whipped the moneychangers out of the temple. He wasnt at all kind about it, because they did'nt deserve kindness.
still, even righteous anger, when over-fed, can turn to wrath -
Nice... i liked the poem, it was awesome. i got a hint of meter, but i am unsure, something through me off. i loved your rhyming. they were really good. they were close to perfect.
Wrath is often born of righteous cause
because of my faith i have to disagree with this. usually, righteousness is humble, not violent.
Blood boiling for the slightest of reasons
unable to speak softer than a shout
these lines are my favorite. they explain most of the world in a few small words. a lot of people just want to yell all the time. lets teach them how to whisper.
love,
mike
good job -
Love your work
All fabulous
My favourtie lines are
"Pity the man who's heart is hardened
who's judgement is clouded by anger's shade"
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the flow and the words were very good. it went together so well like a puzzle and i got pretty wrapped into the thoughts of it and the anger expressed. i enjoyed this much. had it been longer i might have been bored, so the length was good also. structure rhyming and all that was good.
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Hi my friend this is a super write, perfect, great feel, great flow, a winner if ever there was one, this should do very well, it is so true, you know I am still waitin for you to write on the gods of ancient Egypt, why not together? this has my applause, hugs Di
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I liked: the simple articulate thought you expressed with great economy. I enjoyed reading this. It kept my attention throughout. Thank you for sharing this.
I disliked: that there was no line in here that stood out for me. There was nothing memorable. Nothing that made me go "wow!" -
This poems expresses,a cold and closed person that expresses his anger though violence,I like the way you explain the feelings inside and where it leads to from doing it,the word just flow.
Brandy3
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