Why can't I write this love poem?
Why can't I write this song?
Deep inside I want to say,
Come back to me dear friend.
Each line starts out perfect
Then turning and twisting anew
Always ending with me
Sending you away
But deep inside I want to say,
Come sit with me again.
My pen seems to betray me,
Is this what I want to say?
As for me, I cannot say.
But come back to me dear friend.
Through all my troubles,
You were only there in half.
Forgetting me a second later,
Promises unkept.
I want to write a love poem
To draw you back to me again,
But it doesn't come out right.
Deep inside i want to say,
Come back to me dear friend.
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Written July 13th, 2005
Edited November 25th, 2007
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Why thank you, Miss Lady, your comment is very much appreciated. lol. yeah. thanx. And the same to all the rest of you! cherche-d-ame, and got2befree. Your comments were very helpful.
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I think this was beautiful!! It says a lot and is worded perfectly, and even though the poem kept saying "it doesn't come out right", somehow, it has. The entire thing was wonderful, and I don't believe there were any unneeded parts (which would be typical of a sort of "I-don't-know-what-I'm-saying poem)!!!
YAY!!! *APPLAUSE!*
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I do think we all get those moments where we just write away and then not really know where it came from or what it is meant to say. But sometimes writing is just a way of reaching out and maybe touching someone with the content .....and I think you did a pretty good job
Reenie
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For not knowing what you were writing, you created a very pretty poem. You speak of writers block, "my pen betrays me" and difficulty speaking your feelings but in writing that you have said so much. Some times the most difficult things to say can be said without words. This is a wonderful piece of writing with a simple message about being alone or left behind.
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well done
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