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Beyond you

I hate the way you looked at me
the way you uste frown
the way you uste stare
to try and put me down

wont happen again
Im past it all
no point in trying
to make me fall

Ive mooved on
wish you had to
im somewhere else
im over you

but your still there
being the same
breaking somebody else
not taking the blame

I think you should stop
I think you should quit
theres more to live
so get over it



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Written July 13th, 2005

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  • Jules1
    July 14, 2005
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    humm trying to figure it all out!!!

    hi great write cherub! i cant quite figure out what your trying to say coz knowing you its probably more than what it seems to say! lol im sure ill figure it out soon tho. im thinking mayb about kat or someone else not sure still thinking. well cool good to see your writes. have fun and ill see you at andys party 2moz. hehe it'll be fun. loves ya. jules xxx


  • vbstar4
    July 13, 2005
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    Nice write. Break ups suck! but this is a good way of expressing your feelings. I like this write it shows ur anger yet there seems to be some sadness in it. It's good that you've moved on. It usually takes me awhile lol. Well keep up the awesome writing.
    -Jen-