Dreams,
fleeting fragments of fancy
that germinate in the brain
and evolve into montages
of momentous imagination.
They bend the brackets
of absolute Truth
and breach, briefly,
the vacuum of verisimilitude.
But dreams evaporate
with the morning sun
and become distant vapors
hanging from the heavens.
So I climb the noose of truth
to inhale the stellar haze.
Inebriated by its mirage,
I linger laxly in bliss
and revel in the sensation of
reality, interrupted.
Author notes
After a lengthy mental block, this is my first write in months. I'm fairly pleased with it, and I think I did well in delivering my message. Tell me what you think.
Written July 12th, 2005
What did you think
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Beautifully written, this just sounded so familiar to me. Then I realised why! http://allpoetry.com/poem/530140
Kat
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i like this one
i learned new words actually
But dreams evaporate
with the morning sun
and become distant vapors
hanging from the heavens.
i like this part
especially when the dream is too beautiful
it feels almost real
and then you wake up
that fine line between dreams and reality
umm interrupted
this is really good
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Intriguing
An interesting poem that conveys in striking imagery the essence of dreams, their exaggerative and fantastic aspects which rescue us from the"noose of truth". I thought your exaggerated use of alliteration - letter "v" for example cleverly reinforced the surreal, exaggerated world of the dream. All in all, I enjoyed this unusual poem. camus -
I love the use of your literary devices, excellent alliterations (just to name one)!
I very much enjoyed:
fleeting fragments of fancy
that germinate in the brain
and evolve into montages
of momentous imagination
that's some picturesque imagery- very artsy so Van! -
i like the way you put it "noose of truth"... i thought that was great.
good write! i liked it. -
I really like this. Reality sucks majorly for me, especially lately. I kind of get lost in my dream world and space out a lot and it feels so good, until reality interrupts once again.
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I really enjoyed reading this poem. Very good imagery and it has a very nice flow. Thanks for sharing and always keep writing. ~Karli~
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Great!
I really loved this poem. The metaphors are wonderful and the title really grabs your attention. Wonderful work! The flow is nice and the stanzas fit wonderfully with the flow and the words
I truly enjoyed this read!
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I really enjoyed reading this poem (I can relate) But I had to try to see past the background, it covers every first letter on the left of my screen.
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i stopped to read this poem because of the title. it got me thinking, and i wasnt sure what to expect but i wasnt let down. it kept me reading and the words you used were amazing. good job keep it up and write some more. i enjoyed this a lot!
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this is really cool
Dreams,
fleeting fragments of fancy
that germinate in the brain
and evolve into montages
of momentous imagination.
They bend the brackets
of absolute Truth
and breach, briefly,
the vacuum of verisimilitude
taht is an aweosme was of starting this out, and i loved the metaphors, perfection at its closest, keep it up -
Well you are sure unblocked!A superb piece of writing.Wonderful use of words and you conveyed so much and stopped at exactly at the right point.Will be looking for more of your writes!
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I like the underlying message, and there is a fun word-play going on. However, a lot of the images are cliche' and that distances me from the piece as a reader. If you took out all of the cliche's... build from those six or so lines that are left, this piece would move from good to brilliant. Dreams are tricking in writing... or the image of dreams. It's hard to write about those things without using an over-used idea/image.
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I have been having some mental block myself, but I think it is due to much stress I have been dealing with lately. I have grown to embrace the down time, to use it as a means to gather new thoughts which will eventually make it into written words. I think this poem is fantastic. Its message is simple, and yet stated clearly with a great flow. Good job.
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This is a good write a bit rough around the edges but your right the message is there.
I loved the last Stanza
So I climb the noose of truth
to inhale the stellar haze.
Inebriated by its mirage,
I linger laxly in bliss
and revel in the sensation of
reality, interrupted.
Great work -
I really enjoyed the content of this write, a great relief in the escape from reality, and the deftness at which the mind provides this wish.
The strong word choice is something I always enjoy seeing - I love to see poets reaching for the depths of our complex language. Although, at times, the onslaught of syllables seems to impede the flow (something I am myself guilty of).
At any rate, a good write. -
it kind of made me think about the crazy world today and all this reality television...lol...I wish THAT kind of reality would be INTERRUPTED (reality, interrupted) I just had to laugh at that because I kinda wanted it to be 'reaality tv, interupted' lol keep writing I enjoyed this ~Rush
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Your time off was effective if it created this. Some very clear images (montages of momentous imagination, the noose of truth etc)
I enjoyed this. Well done -
i like how you said that dreams fade by the morning sun....like your waking up...right?....welll this was really really good....come and check mine out too...please?
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The flow of this piece went with the theme. a thumbs up for that. You did convey your message well. I also liked that you conveyed it well and still held a few qualities of abstract.
I thoroughly enjoyed your images. Thanks for sharing! -
This is a nice write. I liked your word choice. The length of the poem is just right. I enjoyed the read.
~Dee -
Well it's good to see you unblocked. This is a fanciful and interesting write which I really enjoyed. The words are touching. TOny.
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Interesting
Great juxtaposition of images ( hang and noose) compells reader to imagine more . Strong words choice will send many running for the Webster. -
Enjoyable read..one that holds volumeto still be untold. This part of you piece has such a welcoming a standing in the mind "But dreams evaporate
with the morning sun
and become distant vapors
hanged from the heavens." You have done well! Stay blessed
ICULookn -
A fantastic use of words I can tell you have had a great inspirational rush what fabulous imagery and word usuage this is one stunning creative piece of writing. I am very impressed evrything works so well together and it leaves a wonderful sound and visuals. Great work. Stella. You should enter this in a contest it is so great.
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I really loved this poem! It speaks the truth and it is well written. My favourite stanza is:
But dreams evaporate
with the morning sun
and become distant vapors
hanged from the heavens.
Couldn't be more true Great work! You are very talented.
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