Whilst sitting here pressing keys.
I felt a cool and pleasant breeze.
Then something whispered in my ear.
"Here's a chance for you my dear."
I looked around but saw no one there.
I even looked beneath my chair.
Then as I began to type again.
I heard a silky soft refrain.
"A winner you will be, will be.
If only you hearken unto me.
You are bound to be judged the best,
If only you enter this new contest"
Much more of this I could not take.
I soon began to shiver and shake.
But still nothing was to be seen
except the light from my computer screen.
But those were not the words I'd tried to write.
That flickered there in black and white.
The words I saw when I looked up.
Are the words that'll win me the cup.
At the end I could plainly see
Your contest link on the site AP.
So I decided, just for fun
To write and tell you that I've won.
Author notes
WOW. I actually won my first competition with this.
Written July 11th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- The "Just Tell Me Why You Should Win This Contest" Contest by QuinnTessEntity.
325 points, ended July 17, 2005, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thanks again for your comments. I am told I was the only one who actually said he'd won so the organiser gave me the prize. That's nice because I'm not usually so pushy!!
Jim S -
Very cute and oh so bold, but that certainity had its merit, for you gained the prize you had sought or was that claimed? Funny poem and enjoyable to read.
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Another humorous one. Glad to see that there are some out there who still enjoy flights of fancy in these types of writes. I've always enjoyed them. Congrats on the trophy!
peace
doug
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Me and my big mouth again.
OK take a peek at my author page. You'll find me in a ddress on the biog.
Jim S -
No, no one told Dominangel about anyone in dressees...but now that you have mentioned it...
I don't see how you could have been astonished that you won. Didn't you read your own entry? YOU were the one who told ME!!!
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OH NO!
Do you ever wish you'd kept your mouth shut? I wish I had.
Did someone tell Dominangel? I wondered how I could have beaten you. I bet she want to see me in a dress too!
I'll send you a copy of the presentation pictures in a plain brown envelope in due course!
Jim S -
Thanks for your generous comment.
Jim S -
Thank You
Jim S -
Thanks for your comment. Having read through some of the competition pieces I am astonished (but happy) to have won my first AP Gold.
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Congratulations on winning the gold my dear, you deserved it. Now you have to
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Good job on this poem and winning the gold! This really is a great piece and I like the rhyme scheme in it. AThena
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w00! Congrats.
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Well done Jim A great poem and Sadly I have to concede to a better entry. Gold has found it true place Well done
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Thanks for the commet. Seriously. I'm not funny, it's all pretense to confuse people.
Jim S -
I love the stuff you write. You are have such a great sense of humor, and it clearly shows through your works. Keep it up. This is another great write.
Lauren -
I think I'm going to borrow a flack jacket from Mr Plod!
Jim S -
I'll try as long as the inspiration keeps appearing.
Jim S -
Wow I have to be there at the presentation, as there will be some big battle going on when The gold trophy is about to be handed over.And some deflated ego's( mine included of course)
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wow...these are totally my kind of poems. don't ever stop writing. I luv rhymes like these. keepthem comin'
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Praise from you is doubly welcome. Having read yours I'm not sure my little voice wasn't lying. We'd better leave it to Dominangel.
Jim S
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Now dont be silly dear, I have the winning entry of course.....
Blimey, now I see your entry, I dont feel so confident...lol!
Well done Jim, you almost have me convinced.
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Hello Di.
(It was hard to resist the rhyme there )
I very rarely think of meter, form or any of those things when I write. I write what sounds good in my inner ear. I usualy then re-read and polish bits that jar a little until I'm happy and then say Finis.
I often read my own stuff at various clubs and if I think it's wrong or I could do better then I alter it.
If other people say it should be this or it should be that, I listen-- think about it-- and if I agree change it otherwise not.
With the abundance of free verse, chopped up prose and such like that passes for poetry nowadays I have stopped caring too much for rules. (Unless I am trying to use a specific style that is).
My opinion on this matter does not conform to other peoples, but I try to do what feels right. When I criticise others, I try to bear the same thing in mind. It may not suit me but, if it works, then I accept it. I may not like it. I may even say so but in those cases I am speaking for just one person. Me.
Sorry if this rambled a bit but a question usually deserves an honest answer.
Jim S
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Hi loved the poem just a question I have been told so often not to change the meter in the middle of a poem, can you tell me if this is permitted as I saw you changed it often? if we can I shall jump up and down for joy as will solve so many problems when doing narrative, loved this write, hugs Di
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Thanks Robin. Nice play on words.
Jim S -
Excellent entry Jimbo, you cocky bugger (but I LIKE you!)
Good luck.
R
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I wish I knew how I did it too TR.
Jim S -
Thanks Joanne. I hope Dominangel reads that.
Jim S -
Was that taunt or haunt D. I've had enough of spirits.
Jim S -
I don't how you do it but your so good,good luck in your contest.
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this is a winner! - joanne
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You know, I think that there are some sort of cosmic laws in place that prohibit the use of psychic, super or magical powers for one's own personal gain.
Fortunatly for you, this contest takes place in a completely different reality, and there is no such prohibitions here...
This made me giggle. I must now hunt you down and taunt you.
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