I'm sorry mommy for what I've done
They're always doing it on t.v.
I wanted to try it, it looked like so much fun
I love him mommy
you know I do
I just wanted to try it
I never meant to hurt you
It didn't last real long
But it felt so right
And now my decision
Haunts me at night
I wanted to be a woman
Mommy you know how it is, you do it so well
And now that I've done it
Am I going to go to hell?
It only hurt at first
Then it felt real hot
I'd give anything to take it back
All that I am, all that I've got
Mommy please don't be mad at me
I'm just as scared, can't you see?
When it's dark I pray
After you wish me good-night
But like you've always said 'God is just'
What's fair is fair and right is right
So I wrote this letter to tell you
Your little baby is going to have a baby
Unless your grandchild is aborted
Maybe.
I'm only 15, I'm still just a kid
Which just goes to show you
There's no age limit on sin
Please think about forgiving me mommy
You have no idea how much I cry
I don't even deserve God's unjudging mercy
But just because you love me, could you give it a try?
So this is my tear-stained letter of apology
I'll be sitting on my bed waiting for you to come
Walking in with bloodshot eyes
it was never worth all that "fun".
Author notes
(option # 3) a tear-stained letter of apology to her mom from a pregnant 15yr old
Written July 11th, 2005
A contest entry
- Your Regrets, Sorrys & Aplogizes... by SuicidalLover.
300 points, ended August 17, 2005, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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By the nature of their being, apologies always come after the fact, and whether the person is actually sorry or just sorry for the repercussions is often unknown. She does sound like someone who is sorry for getting pregnant but not for fooling around, which is unfortunate.
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5 Stars *****
omg this is such a sad poem.. i read through it quite a few times.. and i was like soo touched.. you have a very good poetic sense, i must say... your poem is very good.... and the way you have expressed your feelings.. omg you were excellent here
nice write.. good work.. take cares and have a nice time my dear friend.. just keep it up... your humble little friend....
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great job miss talkin to u though sry i LOVE THIS POEM lol
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Talk about powerful I couldnt even imagine how you had to ahev felt to rite this - this just knocks the wind out of me brillianly written but at the same time its not your fault for some where a long the line it sounds to me like you were cohersed into the whole thing man powerful and just plain shocked great write...
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wwooww!
this is like ... wow. i'm, like, speachless. damn. i don't know what to say. it's like ... wow.
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Oh my gosh!! this is amazing! I love it, seriously this is the best poem I have read on here, lol. wow, I loved everything about it, I found like nothing wrong! My poems stink more after i read this one Keep it up**
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awesome
i don't agree to the person named wake up neo i already wrote something but i share this to all my friends i really love it you are so amazing -
this poem sucks
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WOW!!!! this is a really amazing poem!!!! it almost made me cry!!!!
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Amazing
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I like it. I can almost feel like I'm you're mother the way you wrote this
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oh gosh...
what happened in this poem was terrible... I know it really happens but I sure hope this didn't happen to u... It reminds me how cruel the world is nowadays... how wrong society has become... and how strong the bad forces are to make people do things like that......sad but terrific.keep up
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AMAZING JUST AMAZING!
Amazing poem...though this doesn't mean much to you but I started crying...dont ask why I just did...I'm praying...though I dont know you your in my prays...
God Bless God Heals God Loves Your In My Prayers,
Josiah B. Ewing
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I guess I will join everyone else by saying WOW!!!
I know of this...i had a child at 17, and it really hard, but my son is my life...thanks for sharing and again...wow.
Excellent job
Tammy
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Wow
A Very stunning poem indeed.. I really could visualize
that poor girl trying to explain to her mother that
she has become pregnant, hoping to get atleast
some support and warmth but expecting to be really
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totally awesome
wow... wow... amazing... im going to applaude this even though there are so many! this is truely an amazing poem
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Ver Kick Ass!!!!
wow...this is really emotional, i was on the verge of crying....but i also felt a lot of anger by reading this too. If this was written from your experience Then your mother should be there no matter what, you shouldnt have to fight for your mom's help...moms are always supposed to be there...This is a astounding poem!!!! -
Wow....That was an amazing poem!!!! You did an excellent job making us know how you feel. Great job! Keep up the outstanding work.
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Wow this is really good, well done
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wow babe, you are a great writer! well done! your poem has so much emotion, it sends chills through my spin love your work keep it up xo
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wow what can I say ....
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ohh wow this is just an amazin poem. Its so sad.
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wowee thats alot of applauds this poem is fantastic its a perfect poem for teen sex abuse or something like that and you have the sense when you are reading this that you have crawled into somewhat of an inner child when u apologize and the way you talk I dont kow this may not be the best way of giving you some feedback but this poem is good and thats all you need to know I geuss...
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GREAT
hey ashley, that makes me think of you, i <3 u so much, please dont do it... and the poem kicked ass -
Awesome
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I LOVE IT
I loved it.. i felt so much emotion in it.. it was great.. it makes me realize th risks i was about to take..- Ashley -
that was one of the best poems i have ever read in a long time. telling your mother you were sorry in a poem, great peice of work. if i was your mother i would forgive you. keep up the good work in writing your poems
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That was really good. Not making excuses for herself, just laying it out how it is for once. It's unique and it worked for this piece. Definately was a good poem, and deserves all of the applauds. Keep writing and good luck.
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This father says " I understand"
This is what one hopes a poem can make possible. I like the explaination. It is not rationalization, it is an actual explaination. How rare this is. I would not worry about the rhyming, it has a continuous flow, is able to convey feeling without using cliched words and is in conversation with the wider community that is made up of experience and wisdom and purpose.
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It was one of the best poems i have ever read and i have read some really good ones but urs was at the top of the list.
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this emotional poem let you pour your heart out. its just so real it brought a cold chill through my heart and tears to my eyes as i read because i felt like i was in your position. great job. this is definately the number one poem/letter on this site. i truly hope that it all tunrs out okay with you and your mom, and i hope you and your baby live happily together. once again, this was truly an amazing piece; its one of the best i have ever read.
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I love it. Too much to really say anything in a comment. But, I won't be like everyone else and day that it made me cry my heart out, because it didn't. I didn't feel sadness, I didn't really get any distinct feeling from this, which is why it puzzles me so. But it was a great piece, although at one point near the middle the unusual rhyming threw me off a bit.
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Awesome write, it just blew me away, and pulled me in, awesome job, and I hope things get better for you.
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wow!!! this is amazing! i loved it!! i dont know what else to say!
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Definetly the best I have read yet!!!!
Wow this is absolute awesome poem.... it is very good!!! Wow defintely better then the last one i just read and i thought that one was good but omg this one is defintely the best!! so keep up the awesome work and i bet it blew that contest away!!! never give up writing you have a true talent for it!! great work... -
that it is a awesome i now what u mean
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great write . i felt the emotion in it .
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WOW!
Wow! That's all I can say is WOW! This is beautiful how you put it in words. Keep writing! And God will forgive you just stay with Him!!!!!!!1 -
this is good i really liked it darn somany aplauds
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this is like the best poem i have ever read, omg thats awsome,
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wow great poem, thought the least i could do was applaud your poem
thanks for the nice comments on my stuff. Irish people are great
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he he i gave u the 100th applause
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Excellent poem babe, but am sorry to hear about what you are going through your mum will come round in the end i am sure of it as my mum and my best friend was ion the same position and it has turned out ok for them. Be Strong.
May God Stand By You When You Need Him Most!!
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it's a great poem but im sorry what you're going through
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holy crap this is good! lol^^. and it was written just for a contest??? when i was reading it i thought it was an actualy event happening to you, it sounded so sincere and very tear tugging... so perfectly structured and the words al fit together... wish you the best of luck in the contest^^!
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wow hun i can so relate to yr poem..awesom work
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this is quite a deep and sad poem
I'm sorry you have these 'problems' with your mommy... but I'm sure of it, soon enough she will forgive you 'this sin'... allthough I don't see it as a sin myself... it's just something natural to me...
I wish you the best of luck with everything you do!
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This is really heartfelt i loved it hunny kinda confusing but still good well done
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As for the technical aspect of this poem it's rhyme is rife with cliche and the meter is way off in places but the emotional part of it is very sincere and touching. The child is honestly asking for forgiveness and help with coping an adult problem of her own making.
Sincerely,
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I can't pick what it is, but I absolutely love this poem. It has a really powerful message.
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Well, by the number of applauds you have, everyone has liked this. You've done a nice job on this. I suppose this is truly about you, and if so, I wish you luck. Babies are so wonderful, but they are quite a bit of work. My prayers are with you. Patricia
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wow omg... I can't believe the emotion in this... Thanks for sharing I love this poem... It's so sad and so emotional... You made a story into a poem quiet well.. Great luck in the contest!!!!
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Wow, crazy good!
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Wow,excellent...like all the others agree...Keep up the good work
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Wow. That's all I have to say. Just wow. It is the best poem I have ever read on this site about teenage pregnancy. The concept of sounding like a kid, using mommy, kid having a kid, is brillant. I think you did a great job. I'm not just saying this. I really don't say brillant on someone's work. But yours was. Keep writing like this.
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very good poem. one of the best i've read in a while. its very emotional and almost made me teary. excellent poem.
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This one is really good also. Great job!
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I'm amazed, this is well written. I can see why it's gotten so many applause. Good luck in the contest! Athena
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Hmm.. This was interesting.. Not something I could relate to but I think you wrote it amazingly. Good job, I applaud you.
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freaking awesome
That was amazing...beautiful! You have a way with words, I must admit...."There's no age limit on sin", it gave me chills. -
Excellent poem that hit right in the heart. I sure hope I don't get a letter like this from my daughter.
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Extrordinary!
Wow, this is really good. No wonder it has been applauded so many times. Way to go. I could feel the emotion. Please continue writing and have a wonderful day. Sorry, I don't have any applauses to give you, I am out, wait...oh well, I will, if I can! -
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this line
"there is no age limit on sin"
hit home with me... it was very touching and very poingant... thank you
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My sis got pregnant at 15, and wrote a letter to my mom to tell her. I wonder if it looked like this?
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this is so good i dont know what else to say
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this was ABSOLUTELY amazing...you should enter it in a 'chicken soup for the soul'!!! its just PERFECT for one of those
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No wonder why this was a pplauded so many times..this is really really good...did this really happen or is it just another poem...well any ways come and check mine out too ok...thanx for sharing this with us..it was a really enjoyable peice...
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Nice job on this. I've really never read anything like it. This was original and well-written. I liked that. Great job on this!
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This was absolutely excellent. The free verse worked wonderfully and it flowed great to!! The background went perfectwith it too!! Great write.
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Wow! This is such a good poem. Its probably one of the best i have actually read. I really felt the characters pain. Well done!
Love Orical xxxxxx
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Wow! you totally had me thinking Suicide at the beginning but when i got to the end i was WHOA! then i re-read it and it all fell in...EXCELLENT WRITE...keep it up you got the talent!
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awww. it's so sad but good.
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I'm actually very touched that it made you cry.. that really tells me that you felt the emotion of hte poem and that is all a poet can hope for from their work. your comment truly means a lot, regardless of how many others I've gotten. I'm so very glad you liked it!! thanks so much, x3 taste
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thanks soo much for your comment! I love reading all of htem and personally commenting on the ones that mean the most.. I do hope you continue to read my work, I'm jsut so happy when someone new finds they like poems and helps me out mutually, thanks again so much!! x3 taste
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awww it made you cry?! haha wow.. I guess you kinda liked it huh? lol thanks so much for your sweetest ever comment, it makes me happy to know I brought out that much emotion in someone, thanks so much!! x3 taste
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thank you sooo very much!! I can't believe you like it that much, but it means a lot! thanks for taking the time to comment and help out with applause! real sweet of you, thanks again! x3 taste
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wow.. I highly doubt it's the best thing you've ever read in your life... but thanks sooo much for the compliment! I try to personally respond to each comment, and well.. wow. that was just like the sweetest ever! thanks so much!! x3 taste
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oh I'm soo glad you liked it so much! I do have a ton of comments, but I like to personally reply as often as I can. Thanks so much for your encouragement! YOu're such a sweetheart!! x3 taste
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most definately.. I would encourage your abstinance until marriage, it's the best choice and you'll be so happy you did! thanks so much for your comment! x3 taste
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww that is a really sad poem! its one of the first long poems i'm ever read thats kept my attention right through to that! it was excellent! if this was about you i'm sorry! if it was about a mate i'm sorry also! it made me think is it worth having that 'fun' if you can end up pregnant?
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What a beautiful and sad story...but mostly beaustiful. I applaud you on this for sure...it was great. You are, like many tell you, very talented. Definately keep it up...wow, I can't get over it! It was GREAT
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wow i think that that is the best thing that i have ever read in my life...that was very strong...keep it up and you might be going somewhere with this talent
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AMAZING!!!!
wow. thats all i can say for your work..i wish i had more emotions and words to describe it but i dont, all i can say is wow...and that u are an amazing peot with enormous talent. !!!!! -
That was amazing!!!!
I know how it feels to beg for something fom ya mom and not getting it. Strong piece!!! I'm wiping my tears now.
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Absolutely Astonishing!
Starwars girl, (tee hee)
OMG heather i am SOOOOO proud of you! this poem is absolutely pulsing with pasion! this is by far my favorite part:
"I don't even deserve God's unjudging mercy
But just because you love me, could you give it a try?"
ooooh it just makes me want to cry! VERY well written.... but now for a little criticism..... well.... this wouldve been the part where i try to help your poem but there isnt anything i can find its just that good! you deserve the 57 applauses that you have already recieved, it is AMAZING! well i love you with all my heart and everything is going to be okay. and no matter what happens i will always be here for you and my family freaking LOVES you so if you ever want a place to stay... just stop on by!
<3 @lways
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OH MY GOD!!!!! THAT IS LIKE SOOOO AMAZING, WOW IM GOBSMACKED OMG VERY WELL WRITTEN WOW OMG SOO COOOL
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this was a very good poem i thought, im very sorry that your mom didnt forgive you, i have a mom the same exact way and it hurts alot of the time!! but very good job on this poem!!
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9.5/10
mazing.
Talent is what I see.
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WOW! That was incrediable. Well written. Great. Wow! Well done! ~Bettyboop24~ -
Awesome poem so emotional
I'm only 15, I'm still just a kid
Which just goes to show you
There's no age limit on sin
Please think about forgiving me mommy
You have no idea how much I cry
I don't even deserve God's unjudging mercy
But just because you love me, could you give it a try
Love that part especially.
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wow. this is a great poem. good job. i think everyone has done sumthing like this that has disappointed their parents. ur mom will forgive you sooner or later. you no she loves u and always will so dont blame her if shes a lil mad. well anyways, i like it.
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exciting
woa that was good, sad, and deep but good. it reminded me alot of my friend who just found out thier pregy i think they wrote a letter to her parents too, but never the less, i really like this. its well written and i has nice rythym.
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aswome!
i will say againomgosh!!
:'( i want to go cry some more and learn from your mistake
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I can understand the apology, but I have to agree with nearlycivilized. I am a teen~parent or at least was I'm almost 30 now and at 15 you are aware of all the things that can happen to you in regards to sex. I do believe in a womans right to choose but never as a means for birthcontrol. This has some good points to it though.
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I just have one thing to say. WOW!
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this is so sad.. and I don't know, call me bitter, but when you are 15 you are not a child.. I was aware of sex and birth control at 15. You make the 15 year old out to be a victim, but I don't think she is.
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