I lie in this bath,
with water stained red,
trying to let out
feelings trapped inside my head.
I slash my wrists,
to let out this pain,
I don't want to see this world again
as I lay back
to drown my head
I hope they'll be sorry
When I'm dead
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Written July 11th, 2005
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Good
I know what you felt in that one but just know what some people wont be happy and the people that are causeing you the pain I think will care a little -
goody good!
i am using ali apples name to say that her poetry is moving nad she should check out some other perty ites to see whats down and out- awsome ali girl! (even when i'm sober i bet ya!) keep it upp you just developed a whole nother deeper dimention in my eyes... go you! awsome ali apple all! -
Kind of cliche, but nicely written nonetheless.
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This poem i read ages ago b4 i realy knew u, i read it just after i met u n i had 2 find it again. i think itz tha most powerful poem ive eva read. Itz gr8.
Troy xoxo -
graphic
When i read ur poems i can see the words and this poem is really sad... i really like this one its short, sharp and has punches u straight in the face when u read it... I very graphic and still very sad piece... I hope this never actually happens to u... fantastic work... cant wait to read more -
Powerful
Wow. Im speechless! A totally powerful write, very sad
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Great
This is a great poem with a lot of meaning to it. I really enjoyed this poem (in a sense) and I think it's something excellent. Great Work! -
That was really sad. isorry that you feel that way. But the emotion it just like...hits you and i love poems like that i can't wait to hear more from you.
-JoAnlis -
Wow! This is really sad. I'm sorry that you felt like this. The thought of writing this is unbearable. Great write! Gets the point across, with a lot of emotion. Nice work!
~Amanda -
omg, wow. my boyfriend likes cradle of filth, and this reminds me of the cover to theyre cd. this is a really good poem. i like how u did the end.
<3 great write -
I can really relate to it.A real deep and meaningful peice. nice work
-sarah -
wow this is a very interesting poem i luv it
i think its very good at the end its very indignent (for want of a better word)
i can vaugley realte to it though! -
This is really sad. I loved it, I really did; but it was so sad! I think it was just a familiar feeling. I loved how you wrote so little but said so much.
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