sinning in secret
having fun turning her on
changing her
manipulating her
using her
stealing from her
she doesn't even know it
this is not what I meant when I said
"I love you"
heart aching
hurting
conviction for the things I've done
fear of man
fear of consequences
sin suppressed
pushed underground
hidden from view
trying to change
not quick enough!
sin dug up
consequences revealed
hurtful hearts
lost love
I'll never know her again
But no one is to blame but me.
Author notes
Written July 10th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Pain by Il Poetic.
300 points, ended July 11, 2005, 34 entries
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I am not big on lost love poems, and this one is pretty much run of the mill in the genre. It works as catharsis of course, so it's fulfilled it's purpose. Not bad for what it is.
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Wowy, I can see the relation in this one, and I can also see the message, tone and emotion layed within. The only beef is the use of the word her to much, but outside of that, this was fine, keep up the good poetry man!
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I like this poem...it says alot in so many descriptive words, I like your style...it was dark, sad and deep..very well written..
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uhmm good one
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Oh, this is really good. I really enjoyed reading this. Love is something that everyone feels, and it can be hurtful, or it can cause you the most happiness you can ever feel. Thanks so much for sharing this..
Excellent job,
Tammy
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it certainly is fun turning people on... that sucks that other people were getting in the way of your relationship. i wish i had advice for you but the best i can offer is that whatever is meant to happen will happen. and God helps those who help themselves.
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this poem rocks if you look at it long enough, even though i have been done this way, i still like the poem.
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