Come fly with me we'll soar up high
With happiness we can't deny
We'll live a life of ecstasy
We'll soar up high come fly with me
There is no doubt we'll have a ball
Replete with joy no pall at all
All bad and irksome things we'll rout
We'll have a ball there is no doubt
All day we'll sing all day we'll dance
With nothing to impede romance
Joyfully, sweetly bells will ring
All day we'll dance all day we'll sing
Come fly with me we'll soar up high
Our hearts, souls and spirits will sky
From now until eternity
We'll soar up high come fly with me.
Author notes
Pw type 7.Two rophies.One HM
Written July 10th, 2005.Option.Rhyme
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A contest entry
- Prewrites for Love by intanglio2ring.
300 points, ended July 20, 2006, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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What did you think
Comments
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A really excellent Swap Quatrain poem that was a pleasure to read. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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Thanks for sharing. I'm removing this from the contest however, because I have many stronger entries and I feel the rhyme is too predictable for what I'm looking for.
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Neither judge is a fan of these repeating forms but this is a well worked example, rhymes well and flows beautiful making it a well deserved HM
Thanks for the entry and please keep coming back in the later rounds
Jeff and Sue
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I like the form...
You have a lovely poem here. It is light and happy and at the same time written to strict form. Well done.
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wow this was a very nice job here i think you did a very good with your thoughts here thanks for sharing
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this was a nice poem it sounded like musical winds just grazing across your face i think you did a great job good luck in the contest
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this is very beautiful, i loved the ryme scheem and the meaning. its not very often that you see a happy love poem, and today i was blessed with a good one. thank you for making my day!
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I'm sorry, but this poem does not fit the intentions of my contest.
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I didn't quite get this verse" "Our hearts, souls and spirits will sky" It seems as though you're sticking the word sky in there just to rhyme..maybe you can explain that or something. Thanks for the entry.
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a bear
Sky to me means to be or to become high.A metaphor .
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its very beautiful, not exactly what i was looking for, but still very lovely. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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well well well i see your a guy eh i just know that from the contest you entered before
I love this poem its utterly lovely in every way
I loved especially
Come fly with me we'll soar up high
Our hearts, souls and spirits will sky
From now until eternity
We'll soar up high come fly with me.
those were so reallly sweet lines. Good luck in my contest.
OMG this is gonna be a hrad judging contest for me tooo many good poems now a days -
The format of this poem is nice and I love how oyu repeated certain stanzas. Great write and thanks for entering
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WONDERFUL write!!
i loved it!
thanx for entering!
take care and good luck!
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Aww, that's really cool! I like it a lot! Great images.
Great poem, and the best of luck in my contest!
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Dear Billbard,
Very good us of your form.
Thanks for entering my contest!
Tang -
Nice write! I liked reading it and I liked how you stayed consistent with your rythming. Excellent work! Thanks for entering the contest!
LoveDroveMeCrazy4u
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Nice write, really like it, The rhyming seems a little forced but still really good. Great Job! Good luck in th contest.
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Very loving and very well done! Thank you so much for sharing and for entering in the contest!
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Another optimistic write. It's nice to read something that can put a smile on my face. I love how you always seem to use specific forms. I have great respect for those that can use forms (or have successfully used forms) that I can or have not. (I'm not too good at these.) Thanks again for entering!
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What a delightful treasure this was to read. Congratulations on your silver trophy. Turly an awarding winning piece. ~Pam
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This is great! It's so beautiful and cleverly written. The scheme is a new one to me and I think it is done wonderfully. The lines just flow one into the next cleanly and is an ease to read. It's smooth and listless almost which adds to the feel of the piece. Well thought out rhymes just add to this and complete it. Bravo. Thanks for the fun read.
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There's a song, "Come Fly With Me". It's really neat actually. When I first saw the title of this piece, I thought of that song. Reading this reminded me of my first time flying, when I went to see my bf. Thank you for reminding me of that. I loved this!
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I liked: your rhymes. They were very effective. Keep that up.
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Wonderful and lovely poem. I loved it and thought it was written quite well and the flow was nice also. Great job on this write. I loved it. keep writing and thank you for sharing.
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And I am ready to fly!I often dream of flying so this poem touched a chord,it is so catching and lively.Well done!
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A very lively poem, quite upbeat. I like the flow of words. I am new to this form of poetry, tried it once and could finish it, but you have done well my friend. The switch in the first and the last line really gives this quatrain, a better feel. Maybe I will learn from you Great Job my AP friend.
Peace,
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Wonderful
Great work, I liked the flow and meaning of the poem. Beautiful writing.
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