You're beautiful in every way,
I just don't know what else to say,
your soft green eyes like rarest jade,
a wondrous thing that God has made,
your smile which always brightens my day,
the feeling of always wanting you to stay,
you may not believe me when I say you're cute,
but in my eyes there's no one who compares to you,
and though you will likely doubt every word,
the thought that your ugly is wholly absurd,
you're beauty to me is more precious then jewels,
and those who don't see it are no more than fools,
so please heed my words for I tell you the truth,
I can't think of anyone more beautiful than you...
Author notes
I wrote this on a whim, though I meant every word. It's the first non-depressed poem I've written in quite some time... it didn't really go over like I'd hoped but that can't be helped now.
Written July 9th, 2005
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Very nice dewd, I like it alot...and pretty sure if you got her to read it she would like it too. It seemed a little rushed but it gets your feelings across. Very nice, hope to read more. -
beautiful
This was a really beautiful poem. I understand exactly how you feel. I try to put my feelings into words but they never seem to come out right. How is it that you are able to so wonderfully put your emotions into words?
"Your smile which always brightens my day
The feeling of always wanting you to stay
You may not believe me when I say you're cute
But in my eyes there's no one who compares to you"
This is so amazing. I can relate to this because when I think someone is beautiful but they don't see it I always want to tell them exactly what I see in them. Tell them how gorgeous they really are. You know? Great poem. I can tell right now that in your life, writing will take you far. I hope the girl you wrote this for knows how you feel. Once again, this was truly, sincerely, spectacular!!!
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Oh wow kyle.
it was... so sincere and gentle.
i can actually see her eyes and the
more I read the more I find myself wholly
jealous that Im not her.
Make sure the girl you wrote this for
reads this.
so please heed my words for I tell you the truth,
I can't think of anyone more beautiful than you...
so beautiful kyle. I should be online tonight
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A very touching poem, with a unique pattern to it. I will say that some of the rhyming seems a little forced and the flow at times choppy, but overall a good write.
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a nicely written sweey heartfelt poem of love for he sweety in your life very well done!!
love and light
blaze -
Heartfelt and sincere poetry here.
"you're beauty to me is more precious then jewels"
Very sweet. Keep writing -
What I liked: very sappy and cute. Your aims may be modest, but then again, I don't think you are overreaching. Overall, I thought this was entertaining.
What I didn't like: the rhyming scheme was forced, and almost took away from your words. Then again, this poem was so sappy, the bad rhymes almost complemented the sappiness.
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