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Really

The Truth Hurts

You know the truth hurts
So why torture yourself
You know in your heart
The pain makes you aware
Aware of every move I make
You're watching me
I feel your eyes on me
Watching me
But the truth is
We're over and
The truth hurts...
doesn't it?

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Written July 9th, 2005

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  • AlyssaEngaged
    July 10, 2005
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    OMG...i love this poem..i wish u would have wrote it a week ago..it would hae helped me alot! but this is really good-alyssa


  • myron silver member
    July 9, 2005
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    3/10

    yes the truth does hurt, that's an old cliche...good poets don't use cliches, they find their own way to use language.

    i think there's a spelling mistake in this line:

    You know in you heart

    should it be "your"?


    the truth hurts: this is not an example of a good poem. it does not contain images, metaphors or insight...

    i hope i haven't been too mean, but the truth hurts...


  • EsotericCure
    July 9, 2005
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    Now, go give this to whoever it is! (lol) Nice write!