WW2 brought a despair of a ghost combatant
Account whose prisoner's liberated its death torment
Ravaged its captivity survival of torture patent
After the rise or fall Bataan's fallen cursed
Narrative sustained deep in the PO W's jungle underwent
Death's march laid behind a camp of pain brigade
Partly from the war laid its shelter engrossed
Entwined a brutal march of an attack of humanity
Arrived so deep of scars hidden the ghost
Charred from the clutches of Japan's brutally insanity
Escaped on the road of Bataan's military post
Elite commandos first introduce true quest of bravery
Pain and loss encountered its balance of trade
Intervene the loss of prisoner's fallen into slavery
Combatant to the prisoner's survival foreign aid
Author notes
War is inevitable to humanity as we strive for peace. We look at it as a survival to the planet. It may seem harsh but we strive to keep humanity flourish on a dead planet. As we need peace to liberate us into humanity, we can't live without both for survival.This is based on the true story of the \
Written July 7th, 2005
Contest rules audition as follow:
1. been on AP since 2004
2. haley27
3. adult:53yrs.
4. at least once a day.
A contest entry
- Acrostic #2 by Lucky 2006.
300 points, ended March 30, 2006, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this was fantastic. told such an important story of history, and you penned it well, so it didn't seem "blah".
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thank u
thank u for the applaudes and the comments given to my poem. Haley27
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The fact that this is an acrostic and it is poetic and it tells a story as well tells me, you have obvious talent. Congrats you have passed the audition.
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50/50 for following rules
25/25 for overall poetic ability
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thank u
thank u for liking my poem, the overall rating on my poem. Haley27
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Thank you for liking my poem and honest critique. Haley27
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I applaud your ability to rhyme acrostically,it's something I've always had trouble with. This poem conveys quite a bit of emotion, though I must agree that the rhyme scheme change makes it a little awkward. But other than that it's wonderful!
thanks for entering and best of luck to you!
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This a summary of the "Ghost Soldier" in acrostic form. It spells "WAR AND PEACE EPIC" based on the true events of the real story "Ghost Soldier". I hoped you liked. Haley27
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This is an interesting piece, I didn't get too many entries about war, and so this must go into a category seperate from the rest. SOME THINGS TO THINK ABOUT: in the beginning your rhyme scheme is set up one way, and then half way through the poem it changes. Perhaps you might consider revising it so it's more consistent, or maybe you like it how it is, in which case, that's cool. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!
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Thank you for liking my poem and such gracious comments. Haley27
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Bravo
Contest Comment
Thankyou for being one of only three original entries, the rest were prewrites. In regards to your poem I would like to congradulate you on a fine piece of writing. As well as conveying emotion with your writing; you also managed to empart a number of deep messages concerning war and peace. This was exactly the type of entry I wanted.
It has often been said that that war breeds peace yet peace also breeds war. Thus one cannot live without the other, yet again this was great read and for being one of only three original entries, while the rest were prewrites you will get a applause.
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