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Vague Impression

Temperature rises but I'm chilled to the bone
I can tell what's going on without even knowin'
Words unspoken echo in your eyes
Hard to tell what is truth and what are lies

 

I get the vague impression that you don't like me
It's precise and petty, and it's there for all to see
Seems rather silly to turn your back on what we'll be
I get the vague impression that you don't like me

 

I know all the words you want me to say
But you change your mind every single other day
You're running away from future contact
Not trying to fight, just pointing out that…..

 

I get the vague impression that you don't like me
It's precise and petty, and it's there for all to see
Seems rather silly to turn your back on what we'll be
I get the vague impression that you don't like me

 

Images frozen like a slide show in my mind
Remind me why I should even waste the time
Been too damn long, now my life is just a haze
I knew the costs, but my soul's the one who pays

 

I get the vague impression that you don't like me
It's precise and petty, and it's there for all to see
Seems rather silly to turn your back on what we'll be
I get the vague impression that you don't like me

 

 

Author notes

First lyrics that I have ever written. Spur of the moment write, of course, but wanted to try the lyrics side of things. An altered version of 'Images frozen like a slide show in my mind' appears in Twelfth Replica's song Sunday Hero. (the song was written for them)
Written July 7th, 2005

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  • Barbara gold member
    July 31, 2005
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    My soon to be brother-in-law is in a band....I wrote this for their band(spur of the moment write ).....and had a Jann Arden/Sarah Mclachlin(?) tune in mind for it....then he starts doing this head basher heavy metal tune, and I go "That works to"


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    July 29, 2005
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    Do you play an instrument? How about guitar?

    I see a possibility of blues......Da da ..da dum...
    all we need is a chorus.....

    But oh, yes. I have a Bflat........good to go.

    Thank you.

  • Maddox
    July 14, 2005
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    Whoa! This was great!!!!! I loved this song, Lyric, poem thing!!! extremly cool. I loved it! Three thumbs up!

  • wlmc
    July 14, 2005
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    As I randomly click on poems ( as a newcomer) I am yet again filled with a satisfaction .....the words show your heart and I know that of many others. Very nice. Em
    Edited on Jul 14, 11:44 because 'I missed a word and it made no sense'.


  • meangirl101
    July 14, 2005
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    this is awsome i thnk you made a wonderful impression of how you felt


  • HooDoo
    July 14, 2005
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    Good thought and nice word choice to convey your message across.
    Munky

  • MsFuture
    July 14, 2005
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    very good (tres bon)

    good very good the thought that you were explaning was very clear to me to i give you a thumbs up

  • XxXeMpTyLoVeXxX
    July 14, 2005
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    This is something many many people can relate to. This is amazeing and i love it.


  • capricornpoet
    July 12, 2005
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    the fractured soul

    this was nice , i loved the repetition here a lot like a pantoum,but lyrics , got to try that myself sometime in that
    scheme , how this was sad though of words and unspoken truths , leaving one hurt or the soul mixed up ..hurt is hurt


  • TanyaB
    July 11, 2005
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    This definitely has a Jann Arden feel to it. I can almost hear it sung to music similar to that of "Insensitive". Nice job

  • Flipped Hangman
    July 9, 2005
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    i like it-it has an impression of lyrics, but at the same time its has a poem-like feel to it.Its sad, but at the afterthought, it kind of makes you laugh, just for a second. This poem kind of reminds us all of a person in our life, that has given us an impression of not liking us.
    keep up the good writing!
    ~S. Ann~

  • Poetress2005
    July 9, 2005
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    AH! anyone who says this is bad, shoudl be struck down by lightning It was very very well written and I like the topic alot, because it should be directed at my boyfriend at the moment. Nevermind...long story lol. ANyways great job dear and keep up the wonderful work.
    ~V~

  • zenrobes69
    July 9, 2005
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    I really liked it. I'm used to not being liked!

  • Saturnine Serenity
    July 9, 2005
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    I liked this a lot, it was very descriptive, very meaningful. I'm not sure what the above (or is it below?) comment means, but I would listen to this if it were a song.


  • SimpleSarcasm
    July 9, 2005
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    This reminds me of a certain poetic form, I can't recall which one. You say this is lyrics? It's interesting I've never written any lyrics. I think you did a good job for your first time writing them.

    ~Dee


  • wattle silver member
    July 8, 2005
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    Ms Barbara, A poem, he must be nuts, but then lots of people cannot choose quality correctly. I guess we need losers so we can identify winners. Thank you (more please).

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