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Ode to the floor

Whether its wood, or tile
its matters not.
All that matters is whether
its holds you up or not.
If it were to break,
The floor you'd start to hate
but since its not, you
just dont appreciate!
Take your time,
thank the floor
for allowing you sit,
stand, and... so much more!
Maybe you don't like the floor
or maybe you've got carpet
either way i think that you
should flippin fricken farget.
Oh-sorry for going off subject
I didnt really mean to
Its just that nothing rhymes with carpet,
so yeah, ooww my friggen boo boo.
Excuse me for that interruption,
I've done it once again
It's just that I was injured
by my pink and purple hen.
So take your time
and thank the floor
and it will help you
out the door.
But if you don't,
oh never mind this
I've got to clean
the friggen cat piss.

By the way..its on the floor!

Author notes

hehe..just a lil suttin suttin
   
Dont usually do comedy..but whatever floats your boat!
Written July 7th, 2005

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  • flipflopinTM
    August 21, 2005
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    Hee hheeeeee LLIIZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ! heee lol so funny love the pink and purple hen lol and the part with the cat and
    "Excuse me for that interruption,
    I've done it once again
    It's just that I was injured
    by my pink and purple hen." that whole section nice job
    T


  • Eye Sea
    July 29, 2005
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    Fun-ly Halarious

    Hilarious! What a cute cat that pissed on your floor!


  • Shadow Keeper
    July 27, 2005
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    Haha, definitely a different kind of poem there. I liked it though because it was very original and different. Good flow and great idea for a poem. Nice job!


  • La Dama del Ayer
    July 15, 2005
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    comedy suits u-lol u r really good at it
    i love your ode to the floor, it really gives out a great message-
    am already thanking my wooden floor
    great poem really made me laugh
    keep it up latina


  • robert bolin
    July 10, 2005
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    i loved the humor in this whole poem it was funny as hell
    and the ending was just as brilliant you are a great poet
    Very talented and your poem also had a great flow again thanks
    For the laughs it was a real hoot now im out the door before the floor gives me the boot...


  • evilbatwoman
    July 10, 2005
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    It was almost funny. you should reread it and fix all of your misused contractions. its is the possessive form of it. it's (which is what you should've been using) is the contraction for it is. i did like the part with the little angel head, that was funny. keep writing.
    4EVER BEIN ME,
    WESLEANN


  • ricochet rabbit
    July 10, 2005
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    What I liked: this is quite a humourous piece.

    What I didn't like: I'm not a fan of smilies in poems, and I think the rhyming was forced.

  • Only To This Paper
    July 10, 2005
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    HAHA This is great!!! Thanks for making me laugh!
    mel


  • Sharkbaitoolala gold member
    July 7, 2005
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    LOL! Thats GREAT it's really funny I loved it! Thanks so much for the laugh!
    Sandra

  • DaNi-3LL3
    July 7, 2005
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    lol, that was funny, good job, made me laugh!!
    keep up the good work!


  • My Nemesis
    July 7, 2005
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    LOL This is cute. I like it, it is funny - lighthearted, a giggle. Thanks. It is too hot here to think , and this is the kind of stuff I can read and relate to today. Great job.


  • JustAnotherGirl
    July 7, 2005
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    Thank you, Little Lark!

    Hehe, I think the floor with appreciate you. Carpet..I'm going to spend the rest of my life wondering.. "What the heck rhymes with CARPET?" Geez..! 'Little Lark' thanks for reading this! One of my unusual 'silly poems', hehe! Thanks for the encouragement though!
    Edited on Jul 07, 4:28 p.m. because 'I spelled rhymes wrong..geesh! '.


  • His Shoulder Angel
    July 7, 2005
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    Awesome

    That was really funny! You do comedy very well! And I can understand how you are kind of upset that nothing rhymes with carpet. I don't even bother trying to rhyme my stuff. This was brillant! I wish you the best of luck in the contest! I will thank my floor just as you suggested.

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