How many times can someone lie?
It hurts so deep just like a fire
that incinerates your shattered heart
and slowly tears your life apart.
Hatred cuts my fragile skin.
Betrayal kills my soul within.
Your rampant lies take control.
Your animosity takes it toll.
My heart has withered like a broken rose.
Now my hidden pain finally shows.
Author notes
personal......long story
Written July 7th, 2005
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Fabulous!
This was just plain awesome.....it really portrays your inner self and your emotions.Really brilliant job....keep it up!! -
This is amazing...Short, but completly amazing. <3
Kaitlyn -
lol ok close enough then *Shantel*
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thanks! its about my sis but same difference! lol!
~Jarred -
i hate it when someone lies to you and ur like best friends or whatever..u just wanna go home and cry..but good job like all the others
..*shantel*
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ok thanks man!
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Hey man, it's Darryl..this was an awesome poem dude, I dont like liars either, and I can't say I know what ur going through cause no one i really cared about has really lied to me, but I'll tell u this, it aint right to lie to someone u care about....Rachel could tell u what I mean...l8er man
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J.D. this is krystyn's mom, Lisa. This really touched me, i do know what its like to be a teenager and how hard it is to find yourself and believing in someone that just lets you down, this was very well written
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thanks!
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thanks natasha! appreciate it!
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thanks rachel
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whoa this is just wonderful!! great job! if its personal....you dont have to tell it. well im gonna run this was very deep and just beautiful laterz
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I'm here if you need to talk. I hope things get better. I know all about lies and the hurt that comes with them. This was a beautifully sad poem, great write.
~ Natasha -
wonderful poem jd....
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thank you so much for the comment. i really appreciate it.
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thanks bran, next time im on yahoo i'll try to tell you everything...its kind of a long story but i'll tell you anyways
J.D. -
wow...................this is wow........i love this tis really great hope u tell me whats going on sumtime i would like 2 help u since u are always helping me !
love,
Bran -
touching
Beautifull poem, I realy liked this one. It was heartfealt, and I could feel your pain. Lieing usualy does cause more pain than good. It was also very well put together, structure and rhythm were very aparent in this poem. Excelent work, keep it up! Hope you feel better soon too.
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