It's rare moments like these when
I want to cry.
It's rare moments like these where
It doesn't seem fair.
It's rare moments like these where I feel
Like I've just died.
These moments are when you say goodbye.
I have to live in blindness.
Your always so busy that I don't know when
I'll get to talk to you again.
I haven't seen you in forever.
The last time I saw you I can truly remember.
I can remember your smile.
It's the only thing that keeps me alive.
I can remember how happy I was.
I can remember you were happy as well.
It was State One-Acts.
I had skipped school to watched you perform.
You only had about two lines at the end.
I sat in school Saturday to hear those lines.
And to see you.
We didn't say a word to each other.
I didn't really care
Because as soon as you looked at me
I knew that words would have meant nothing.
I just wanted to see you again.
Then it was all coming to an end.
The state champions would be named.
And no matter what after that
You would be gone.
I remember that smile on your face
When your school was named state champs.
I'll never forget it.
After I left I remember thinking to myself
Would that be the last time I would ever see you?
I felt tears form behind my eyes.
But then I heard a voice say that
It wouldn't be.
And that's when I knew
Everything would be ok.
It's rare memories like these that make me cry.
It's rare memories that I'm glad I didn't die.
And if I truly never get to see you again
I just want to say
It's rare people like you that let me know
It's ok to cry.
It's rare people like you that let me know
Rare Moments are what give people hope.
Author notes
Written July 6th, 2005
A contest entry
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Oh this is sad is this from personal exprience? If so you have a my sympathy I know how it feels to care so much for someone and them not be there. Well done and thanks for entering best of luck.
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wow this truly gave me the chills....i have been in this sort of situation before....when i met my ex....i never thought i would see him again....but i did....a lot more....but our relationship is over....hes a great guy....i miss him....but ive moved on and we are still friends.....this is really good through....and so true!
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I thought that was beautiful. The word choice was conversational, but it was so poignent, so bittersweet, and with so much meaning that I didn't mind at all. Beautiful sincerity... This write was full of insight, and it had an amazing message.
There were a couple grammatical things that I'd like to point out... The first is that in the first stanza the word "where" should be "when" because you are talking about time. Also, in the line "I haven't scene you in forever." the word "scene" should be "seen". And in the line "It was state one acts." the name "State One-Acts" should be capitalized so people understand a bit better.
Great write, and keep it up!
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i liked how you ended this poem a lot. i couldn't tell where it was going in the beginning, but you pulled it together really nicely in the end. There's a couple grammatical things if they so concern you:
I haven't scene you in forever. ----> scene should be seen
he state champions would named. ---> idk if there's a word missing but it's confusing. I'm glad that someone knows it is okay to cry. *smile* -
it was awesome
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You're from Nebraska? My son is in the theatre group at Lincoln High that won state one act the last two years. Interesting.
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