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what say you

i have now had enough this time
as i will scream my hate in your face
you have tried to cause me suffering
now it is time for you to learn your place

this is a call out for you all
time for you to commit to your threats
i want to see what you think you can do
i promise though that i will fill you with regrets

i see the ones that are promising my demise
one can not stand or think on his own
the other one really thinks that they know me
but where will they go but nowhere as they are alone

now i have somethings to say to the world
the lies are starting to get very old
i am tired of hearing i am saying this and that
but i guess followers listen to every lie they are told

my side of this story is far from being told
but right now i am telling you to do whatever you have to
as i have now told you to come out of hiding
fight me the way you think it will happen,so what say you

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Written July 6th, 2005

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  • HeavenAsh21
    February 23, 2006
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    This is really good, it's filled with your emotions, they are practically pouring from the moniter, it's almost overwhelming. It's GREAT. this is the kind of writing i love to read. I'm really sorry that you feel that way though, I really am. I hope for the best for you. Nice write. love, ~heaven~


  • dolltrashhh-
    July 10, 2005
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    I thought that this was a great write David, your use of personal pain and hatred was a great add. Some one that you despise has caused you to make an amazing poem with all the powerful emotions they've left behind for you to linger in. I hope to read more from you soon. Keep writing, -Heather


  • MoraganaTheDark
    July 7, 2005
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    REALLY GOOD.....i like it...very powerful and i hope that whatever point you are trying to get across gets there...good job babe love ya kim


  • BlooQKazoo
    July 7, 2005
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    i reeeeeeeeeeally like this one - the rhyming is very cool. although one thing - the repeat of told is a little odd...but atherwise i love it. very heartfelt and personal. im here to talk if you want
    Polly xx

  • HearMyCries
    July 6, 2005
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    great fucking poem i liked it alot keep up the good work love ya booboo

  • Diabolikal Sins
    July 6, 2005
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    hey i saw this on the side and just had to read it. It was good. I like it. I hope everyone else does to.
    ~Stay Evil~
    **DevilDemon**

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