GOODBYE
Hope fades
When you've got Aids.
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No disrespect or offence intended. It just seemed to fit the bizarre rules of the contest.
Written July 6th, 2005
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You can laugh OR you can rant. Neither will help in the end but laughing can be a good anaesthetic (and I don't just mean laughing gas). BTW If you want a good rant about deat try Do not go gentle into that good night by Dylan Thomas
Jim S
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i know i was not supposed to react like this, but there these two lines stood and unwillingly i began to laugh
but on a serious note AIDS is a serious issue and i dont joke about it, it is true hope does truly fade because you've reached the end and no has to tell you that.
some people say no ay will find the cure because the medical field makes too much money from ARVs -
Thanks for stopping by. Glad you liked this and thanks for the applause.
Jim S -
wow. you couldn't have aid more in so little.
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Two of my friends have died of AIDS, so I have to say that you have a point.
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Many thanks for your comment. I am glad you liked my words.
BTW Spike Milligan wrote a poem for the lonely. "Hello"
Now that is short.
Jim S -
i think this isa the shortest yet strongest poem i have ever read good job
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Thanks for the comment. What will be will be.
Jim S -
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....damned. Is it too late to forfit the contest. all too real. -
I know that the contest seemed like I wanted brevity, but no one else really followed the rules. Well most did, but more didn't I think the I don't give a damn at the end of the rules kinda threw everyone off. I actually had someone enter a 2 page poem and they got mad when I said it was too long. Thank you for paying extra close attention to the rules.
-Miranda
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Not horrible Kestryl, just human. At least you realise the situation is not a joke (for those involved). A lot of folk out there don't care even that much.
Jim S -
I guess i'm horrible, since this amused me in an odd way.
I guess it was less the poem and what it was saying and more jsut your author comment. Man, I'm a bad bad person.
Anyways, Good luck in the contest! -
Let's hope science can soon prove me wrong.
Jim S -
Thanks for those words Miranda. I don't know if I know anyone with aids (if you see what I mean) but the rhyme shouted at me and the terseness appealed. (I actually cut 2 words from the last line which would have read::- "When they say you've got aids". Your rules implied that you wanted brevity.
Jim S -
scary but so true!!
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This would be kind of a depressing slogan for anti-AIDS. I haven't really known anyone with AIDS, but I do know that people usually do get depressed and lose all hope when they find out that they've got AIDS. Thank you for writing about a real subject. Most people have written about crazy, psycho, odd ways to die and you've done one over a really real topic. You've managed to snap me out of the sick twisted make believe of the rest of the entries and show me a glimpse of the real-life horrors we deal with everyday. Thank you for entering my contest.
-Miranda
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