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The Greatest Lie Ever Told

The good guys can do whatever it takes
To destroy the bad guys, even if it means
Doing things that are worse than what
the bad guys did to begin with, because
the good guys have Jesus on their side
While the bad guys are normally named Jesus
(Because their parents were good guys).

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Written July 5th, 2005

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  • Katerina Ivanovna
    September 20, 2005
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    I like the circular point of this one.

    I love the idea of the naming of a kid 'jesus'. You make such a good point with this one. Great job!

    Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Naughtygrlred
    July 16, 2005
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    he has hobit feet!

  • a drop of light
    July 7, 2005
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    Well...it makes a point but it is by no means one of your better poems...it lacks your touch...you know the harshness of your usual sarcasm. Its circular nature is quite nice though.


  • catz Moderators member
    July 7, 2005
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    Quite a statement, Jeremi.... I like the way you've contrived this to sort of go in circles... which is what we're doing actually, I think.

    Good write and I wish you luck in the contest

    Dee


  • July 6, 2005
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    There is a very appealing, child-like earnestness to this. Of course, the circular nature and the resonating, simple truth come across loud and clear because of the slightly clever device.
    Edited on Jul 06, 12:32 because ''.

  • UnFoRgIvEnSINS
    July 6, 2005
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    that's so funny!!!!! i like this one, horus....nice job.


  • Dienush
    July 6, 2005
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    I love and completely agree with the idea you have here. I especially liked the last two lines. Thank you for entering.


  • horus8 gold member
    July 5, 2005
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    Yeah, well I don't exactly live in a pompous monarchy
    full of twats that concern themselves with 'proper' English.
    Instead, I live at a giant mall full of obese shoppers some-
    -where near Uranus.


  • Lone Falcon
    July 5, 2005
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    Very interesting...I like it. Keep it up!


  • LadyUnique silver member
    July 5, 2005
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    love the way this goes around to come right back to where it started off with good guys extremely clever and gave me a chuckle


  • Yossarian
    July 5, 2005
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    Kind of an old thought. I wasn't sure what you meant by the last two lines...I must be getting on in years. Sort of stilted, and the language isn't exactly the Queen's English. Easily expandable, so not a lost cause. There's a lot you can do with it. This is only a starting point.

    Cheers,

    Yossarian


  • Imokon
    July 5, 2005
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    Short and straight to the point.

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