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Beach Storm - Sonnet 28

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The darkened sky that hovers o'er my head
Speaks out in rumblings that assail my ears.
The lightening streaks, a jagged golden thread,
Its awesome power spent, it disappears.

 

And in the distance hangs a gath'ring haze,
It's grayness tells me of approaching rain.
Then suddenly the sky's once more ablaze,
And clouds drop lower still beneath the strain

 

Until at last, o'erwhelmed, they split in two,
And drench the land and pelt the rolling sea
With precious water long since overdue
That finely falls from nature's canopy.

 

The dark gray clouds that make the day like night,
Are light'ning laced and ease earth's droughted plight.

Author notes

Had a couple of good storms on our trip to the beach.  Wrote this about the first one.
Written July 5th, 2005

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  • Purrsanthema
    August 19

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    Wonderful wonderful, and surpassing wonderful! What an incredible line '"And drench the land and pelt the rolling sea".


  • stuckonthewall
    July 14, 2005
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    Wow this is fantastic! I love reading sonnets. I can't write them that well but i have to say they are one of my favorite types of poetry! Excellent excellent excellent!


  • FallingSideways silver member
    July 9, 2005
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    Another enjoyable read... The imagery along with the actual picture is just phenomenal. I can see where your words definitely captivate your audience. Well done


  • SexyAngel0418
    July 8, 2005
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    WOW... This is a very beautiful poem... So full of imagery and so vivid!!! I could just picture this storm happening!!!

    Hugs,
    Beth


  • Gatlianne
    July 7, 2005
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    Don't like sonnets but I love storms and you've done more than a fantastic job describing this one!

    Gat


  • KevinDunn
    July 7, 2005
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    Very good. Your sonnets are truly excellent! But "Fin'ly"? Frankly I think the word "finely" would be better. It would not change the meter, and give it a nice ambiguity, packing two meanings into one word. And it would look better on the page, I think. Congratulatioons on a fine poem anyway.


  • SuZyCuE
    July 6, 2005
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    I Love your sonnets, as you know my one and only sonnet was such a challenge, and you just keep writing them with such ease (I sure wish I could) lol. Your imagery in this is wonderful (although after seeing War of the Worlds this weekend, lightning has seemed to lose some of its apeal for me lmao) In any case I love all your poems, they are filled with vivid pictures, beautiful emotions, and such great form. Great Write Paul.

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