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what does this look like from your point of view

the spark in your eye makes my heart skip a beat
and i know it's over used
it's over-rated but i can't help it when you're looking back at me from across a field of blankets
i can hardly stand to keep the words from my lips
and i barely last long enough to tell you how i'm feeling
and i can barely smile long enough to keep the grin on your face
i know i'm so over-rated
and i know my words are simple and time consuming
but as long as you're here listening i'll be here to whisper what i feel
so please
say something
please please
anything, for a word from you
the silence is anything but awkward
but i'd never want to waste a minute with you
and i love the way you look back at me
i can't help but to want to kiss the smile from your lips
and i never knew i could feel like this
each moment i spend is a thought about you
you'd never know it if i told you
cause my words come out in meaningless talk of the weather
of boring hibitual talk of nothingness
but i know that as long as i can look in your eyes
i must be doing something right

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Written July 4th, 2005

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  • Mdeeterz
    July 15, 2005
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    mel this is wonderful, it's just like you said...short and sweet, and i love it!

  • YoungAndInLove
    July 7, 2005
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    melodie i love this a lot a lot a lot...VERY wonderful.