20 seconds ago
the thick shades of red clouds wrapped like ribs around the earth
like you around me
and i felt like i was the world, like i was everything
200 seconds ago
we watched the deep green waves slap mightily into the looming rocks
watched as the horizon became home once again to the sun
watched as the beach was consumed
2000 seconds ago
i was laughing, i was lively,
i was loved
we were flying, the air gently lifted us
as gravity ignored us completely
20,000 seconds ago
i slammed back to earth
because my support was gone
my warm soft world turned cold and hard
hard, as hard as the ground.
Author notes
Umm... as you can tell, I just made this up on the spur of the moment for this contest. I just thought the idea was so good, and the contest didn't have too many entries, so though I can't make my own background I thought I'd submit something, even though I have no chance of winning.
Written July 4th, 2005
A contest entry
- Quotes and Imagery and Backgrounds, Oh My! by Saraphina.
300 points, ended July 7, 2005, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow, you have lovely flow, and very vivid, clear images.
You use descriptive words to the maximum effect, that is also a very good skill to have. I love this write. -
This was another great poem the images were awsome every picture through out this poem just left you wanting more
So in 4 words to best describe this work - i loved your poem.. -
There is always a chance. I'm not really that strict on the background part of the rules, but I would have liked to know why you chose this one. I'm a bit confused about the chronology of this poem because it sounds like you crashed before you were lifted. I'm hoping this shows that "you" were able to be lifted after a fall. I love the first stanza especially and the imagery of the wrapping.
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