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Turpentine Angel (Sionide Star?)

If I were to douse myself in gasoline,
Light a match to make a spark,
Could I be your flame to light the dark?

I plan on never waking up, I plan on never waking up.
    (Love is fake)             (Love is fake)

If I were to douse a rag in sionide,
Get a knife to draw a line,
Could I be your turpentine angel?

Could I be your flame to light the dark,
Could I be your sionide star?
Could I be a stone, could we make a spark,
Could I be your turpentine angel?

*Could I be your turpentine angel?

I plan on never waking up, don't plan on ever waking up.
    (Love is fake)             (Love is fake)
I plan on never waking up, I plan on never waking up.
    (Love is fake)             (Love is fake)

*Could I be your sionide star?

Author notes

* = Maybe switch them.

Kind of weird, yea? I dunno, the rythm and rhyming is fucked, so if you have any suggestion, it would really be appreciated. I actually had to use a thesaurus for a lot for this, and that was the best I could come up with... also, which name is better? thanks.
Written July 3rd, 2005

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  • JoFoxserian
    January 19, 2006
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    must admit, VERY EMO!!!!!

    you should figure out a way to put your stick figures on here bri!
    the rhythm is pretty close but it also depends on the beat that you chose...
    other that,
    not bad for emo


    lisa


  • -PyroPixiStix-
    July 10, 2005
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    It's spelled "cyanide". Good write, though. ^_^


  • Diamondin the rough
    July 10, 2005
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    Turpentine Angle all the way!

  • Orient
    July 3, 2005
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    Sweet. Thank you!

  • daisychainprincess
    July 3, 2005
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    turpentine angel

  • Orient
    July 3, 2005
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    And what did you like better for the title, Turpentine Angel or Sionide Star?

  • Orient
    July 3, 2005
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    Hey, thanks! It was my first attempt at writing an emo song. Hehehe, thanks again.

  • daisychainprincess
    July 3, 2005
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    not wierd
    I loved this.. it actually amazing

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