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Cant you see?

can you see me now
this ever fading image
dwelling upon your dreams
amidst all your screams

we all have a secret
we wont share
cruel despair
in this hardened world

flying whispers
watching faces
crying skies
broken clouds

can you hear me now
holding you close
don't close yourself from me
why wont you let me set you free

do you hear
there is nothing to fear
I'm here next to you
like you always knew

all this fading light
as days turn to night
cant you see?
its all we have to be

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Written July 2nd, 2005

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  • xxlilcexyangelxx
    July 25, 2006
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    This is really good,its really dicriptive and unique.Its short but it tells a story.Great work!!


  • Kochibo
    July 11, 2005
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    This is realy pretty and deep. Great write Pat. Luvs!~
    Leasha