On Sunday morn, while church bells ring
Sacred hymns to the Lord we sing
Our hearts and souls again reborn
While church bells ring, on Sunday morn.
On bended knee to God we pray
Please show to us the proper way
So that we can abide with thee
To God we pray on bended knee.
Our minds at ease, our sins confessed
By God once more we have been blessed
Vowing to continue to please
Our sins confessed, our minds at ease.
Author notes
Written July 2nd, 2005.0ption 1.Sunday Morning
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Comments
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Interesting. A good take on the prompt, except for the fact that it was a bit boring. I know what happens in church, I've been there before, tell me a STORY. What about the lady with the over-sized hat who's constantly gardening? Who skimps when the collection plate is passed around? However, technically this poem is very good. The rhyming isn't forced, the imagery was good and it flowed nicely. Sorry for such late feedback.
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This poetical form looks interesting but I am unfamiliar with most of forms. Nice written poem.
~Sonja~
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*Thinks* It scans well. It rhymes comfortably. However, (by all means, correct me if I'm wrong)it doesn't really seem to SAY anything.
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I think you could write much better without always using a specific form as I've seen in all your poems you've entered in my contests.This was extremely well written with great rhyming.Thanks for entering and best of luck
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This is a form that I have to admit is unfamiliar to me. That is not to say that i did not enjoy it , As i did I too like the way the lines are reversed to complete each stanza,not an easy task to do and to make it an understandable read Well done Good luck in the contest
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Flawless. Your rhyme, rhythm, and mood were totally flawless in my mind. I loved the way you twisted the first and last lines of each of your stanzas, it made the idea stick into my head. I think I shall have to reread and bookmark this one.
Great job,
Ashleigh -
I never grew up aroudn church bells and people on their knees, but this definitely took me to a pastoral place of some beautiful past where this led me.
One line lost the strength of flow for me: So that we can abide with thee. Something offset the natural rhythm of the poem with this.
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First off great rhyming! The topic was good even though Im not that Jesus' and God-like it was good. Good luck with the contest!, Alana
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soothing
This is definitely a hymn. I hear beautiful music. -
Not only did you give me ideas on form I've never used, but the content is excellent. Also, as j x 3 stated, it is very soothing. Finally, it reminds of some sacred verse from say the 15th or 16th century dressed in todays duds. RC
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Hey, this was rather clever! I love how you swapped round the first line of each verse to make it rhyme with the line above, extremely clever, I love it! Dadgummit, it took me ages to type this cos I was getting my letters mixed the wrong way round! Grr. Anyway, thank you for entering my contest.
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Billbard,
I love the way you wrote this. It is a very nice peice. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Very well written
I like this write. I loved how you used the frist line of every stanza and somewhat reworded it and used it for the last line of each stanza. Nice touch. I think that this was very well written. Good luck with the contest!
Casey
God Bless -
Lovely
Lovey soothing words for a Sunday morning
"Our hearts and souls again reborn
While church bells ring, on Sunday morn."
This also is one of the joys of Sunday.
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Dear BB,
I wondered what this might be when I saw it and was delighted when I read it. I like the content as well.
Great idea and done quite beautifully!
Joh-Las Vegas
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