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the hidden fight between my words and your eyes

i'm shaking from with drawl of everything i need
the abstinence is bringing me to the brink
and i'm ready to break
so send me something that i can hold on to
cause i'm falling apart
take my hand and say every word you never wanted to
and i know
the words are hard to come by
but i can accept a quick stutter and a search for words
if that's all that's left maintain my stability
and it's getting harder to keep my grip on reality
when dreams seep in between my sleep
all i know, are the words you said
with eyes closed and the windows down
hold on tight cause here comes the blow
to my ego again
with words i never thought you'd say
contention built up inside of me
and i know
that every word you say is what you mean
and every look you give has a meaning
a hidden agenda that makes me think at every turn i'm f*cking something up
so give me something to say that i'm alright
cause i never know if what i'm saying is right
when you look at me that way i never know what else to say
and i need a sign





Author notes

yeah...i don't really know where this came from. hah. it's not really about anyhting that is happening, i guess it's just kind of random...lol. whatever. it doesnt suck too extremely bad, so yeah.
Written July 2nd, 2005

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  • lalalamelodie
    August 18, 2005
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    thanks alot scott, that made me feel really good inside..............lol

  • XxblackstarsxX
    August 18, 2005
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    hey dont worry be happy and be strong life will soon end and then you will be at peace some inspiring words huh


  • cherche -d -ame
    July 23, 2005
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    with drawl?I am only bringing your attention to this , as I did read about your contest. You seemed to be knocking an awful lot of people ( that they were not writing anything intelligent , that the contests sucked etc) I can't argue that the choice in contests has not exactly appealed to me either , but I would never take it upon myself to call everyone not capable of writing anything intelligent....especially if you are spelling wthdrawal the way you did This poem has potential , but it does need an overhaul as far as getting the sentences and words put together in a more comprehensible way for the reader....but it can be fixed. But basically all I wanted to say is that a little kindness goes a long way , and you sure did not show any at all in the way you posted your contest. This site has some great writers on it
    Reenie

  • lalalamelodie
    July 4, 2005
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    yeah. haha.


  • Piper77
    July 2, 2005
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    You're right...it's not that bad. I actually liked it. I think it really shows how you just can't seem to say the right thing to this person, right? Everything you say screws something up, right?

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