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In Dirt and Darkness

They die in dirt and darkness, buried where the ground is colder.
No name brings no tears, for they are unknown soldiers.

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This is for a two sentence contest about death, so yea its a little short and odd, but there is great maening within it. Any suggestions?
Written July 2nd, 2005

A contest entry

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  • herbal gardens
    July 8, 2005
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    Tearfully overjoyed

    Damned, if this piece didnt blow my mind. It really touched my heart to have someone write about soldiers MIA and POW's. and the fact that you did it in 2 sentences is unbelievable. I had an uncle in Nam that never came back (MIA) its nice to see that some people still remember them.


  • General Watson
    July 7, 2005
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    Very well done. To me, this sounds like the solders of a war. Unknown and forgotten. Even when they gave their lives. Very sad.


  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    July 7, 2005
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    To die and be mourned is one thing. To die and be unknown...
    An excellent piece. Thank you.
    Jim S

  • Toro Q
    July 6, 2005
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    Cool!

    Wow, this is great, i lov it! Better than mine.


  • Dark Rose
    July 3, 2005
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    those sentences held enough emotion and strong demise that personally,i don't think should be changed for anything.i loved how you ended it with ,'for they are unknown soldiers'.wow,that just made this piece more brilliant.this just made me think,'how could two sentences be that powerful?'
    great job,
    D.R.


  • unsexypenguin
    July 2, 2005
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    Yay for me first comment!! I really love this. You had a nice way of showing how cold we are. Honestly, how many people actually stop and think of all the unknown soldiers, forgotten about. This was very touching. I'm suffering thru some pain right now and I'm currently out of my mind, if this comment doesn't make much sense, it makes sense to me, I'll probably come back and edit it when I'm in my right mind. Thank you so much for entering my contest, I love this.

    -Miranda

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