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Nebulous Visions (unfinished)

Unformed dreams like
distant galaxies
creating anew.
Spiral, barred spiral, elliptical,
and those like imaginations:
irregular.

New dreams formed from
remnants of those past,
clusters of thoughts
banding together to
create one night of
nebulous visions.

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Written July 2nd, 2005

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  • July 2, 2005
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    summer champagne

    this certainly feels unfinished. i can see a grand stellar-sphere of a piece hidden in these written remnants. a great start to the piece and a nice cosmogony going into the thoughts and idea-scape of the words. that first stanza is very....[reads again] spinning... i read it and i get a little dizzy in the mouth. but i like it, feels like a rollercoaster ride taken with a lover.

    keep it going veronica

    mark