Life And Death
A being and end.
That is life and death.
Good are bad is up to us.
So make it good.
(c) Rose Patrick July 1,2005
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Written July 1st, 2005
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- What can you say with 20 words by Ray Von.
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cool you manged to cover life and death, good and bad
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Very well done hun. Did you mean "being" in the first line or "beginning" either way makes sense to me actually. Great strength here! Bravo hun. Blessings, Gypsy
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You are right, it's just as easy (if not easier) to do the right thing instead of the wrong. Make good choices-good point~vj
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The third line seems a little off as if it is the mixing of two ideas do you mean either?
Good or Bad it's up to us
or
Good and bad are up to us?
Also I like the idea expressed in the ideas that being is life and ending is death although it did confuse me at the start as although it is an unusual way of expressing the difference between life and death it is very similar to the phrase beginning and end so I couldn't help but stop and have to think if it was a mistake. It isn't but it does force the reader to stop and consider that rather than the poem, or it did for this reader anyway.
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