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Promises Broken

Yesterday's goals, dim memories.
Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears.
Painful scars borne; Love's history.
Futures crumble when doubt appears.

No brightly lit hope envisioned,
When following after harsh words.
Hurt soul splits in twain, partitioned.
Swooned by appeal - when numbness lured.

Apologies made, never bought.
Price paid turned out far too costly.
Though never known what would be wrought -
Must walk into the night softly.

One wish, only to be released.
Granted - now receive this token.
Words written in rhyme, love's deceased.
When promises made . . . were broken.

Author notes

Love is a Universal emotion, the goal we all seek, the prize that can make our lives complete and whole. Love is both timeless and, in too many instances, transient. We all believe, if only because we must, that love can be found. Some- maybe most of us- have discovered it can also be lost.
Written June 30th, 2005

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  • Heather Kelley
    October 1, 2006
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    this is a very well written peice i especially like this right here "Yesterday's goals, dim memories.
    Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears.
    Painful scars borne; Love's history.
    Futures crumble when doubt appears." I can relate to this very much so well keep up the good work and i hope things r well for u
    ~Heather

  • tapballet
    July 4, 2005
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    Very nice job. Good rhyme scheme and topic. since i'm in a hurry, your score is: 80


  • Sayyadina
    July 1, 2005
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    This is so true. Love can seriously damage you because you have expectations and when promises are made and then broken- ur dreams fall apart around u. it can also be a beautiful thing once handled correctly and with sincerity. good write though


  • Vickie J
    July 1, 2005
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    Such profound words-exposing both sides of the coin. Love is good when it's good and it's a killer when it betrays us. Excellent write!~vj


  • strawberryz-n-cream
    July 1, 2005
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    I have definately experienced many many broken promises and lost love as well. I really like this poem and can really relate to it. Take care and keep up the good work!


  • Blazing White Wolf
    July 1, 2005
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    this is a nice write with a nice flow and mostly good rhyme there is emotion in this and unfortuately i think we all have expreenced boken promises nice job
    love and light
    blaze

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