The first cut is made, the second cut shows, the third cut you can see, what others dont even know.
The scars become visible, then people become curious, then I make up some lie, when they ask me if I did this.
I say no, the cat scratched me, in hopes that they will leave me alone, for the truth I hope they never see.
I lay there in my bed, knowing that I lied, so I asked myself again, why I continued to cry.
I lay there for hours, confused in so much thoughts, I feel so insecure, by emotions that are brought.
I remember the phone call, it was one fo my friends, I say Im sorry but Im so confused, Im ready to give in.
I had the knife in my hand, ready to make the forth cut, my friend didnt even realize, that I was giving up.
The phone drops to the floor, then I start to scream, "hello, hello, she keeps saying," could this be her worse dream?
Not a single word, not a single sound, one comitted suicide, with no one else around.
The first cut is made, the second cut shows, the third and forth cut you can see, what others didnt even know.
Author notes
Charoline is the devil.
Written June 30th, 2005
A contest entry
- The Darkness! (death, suicide, dark... you get the idea) by MassHysteriaX3.
300 points, ended July 19, 2005, 16 entries
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great!
i really like this poem! you did a great job creating an image in my mind and making me feel like it was really me this was all happening to!!! i like all the descriptive words!!!! my favorite part is,
I lay there in my bed, knowing that I lied, so I asked myself again, why I continued to cry.
I lay there for hours, confused in so much thoughts, I feel so insecure, by emotions that are brought.
i can really relate to this whole poem but that part really reminds me of me!!!
i really love this poem!!!! great write!!! keep up the good work!!!!! good luck in my contest!!!!
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Awww...*hugs*...i really hope you are okay. This is so sad and full of deep, sad, dark emotions. I hope you get through this tough time. Think positive. Take care. A good write and keep writing.
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not in awhile probably..this poem is true about the 1st, 2nd, and 3rd cut, because they are on my right wrist.
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this is really sad and very personal and i think you hit the emotions just right I really liked this though it is sad but I shouldn't be talking... lol
great poem
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sad -- as usual.
this goes around your suicidal mood lately... kinda worries me... when are you going to write a happy poem????????
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