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Making Wishes That Never Come True

Wasting night after night looking at the sky
Thinking to myself why should I even try
What difference is it going to make
Its not like I can take back all my mistakes

All i want is somebody who's there for me
Somebody who knows whats deep down inside of me
A person to hold me when we are watching a scary movie
Or someone to make silly excuses just to sit beside me

So tonight i will wish upon a star
And i will say what i have been saying before

I want you

hopefully this time it will come true

Author notes

this is really dumb...i think...i was in the mood to write so i just sat down at my computer and starting writing what came to me. so please so what you think...becasue to me this is a raelly retarted poem..lol
Written June 30th, 2005

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  • bluidbabiegirl
    July 6, 2005
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    Awww...Babie I'll hold you. . Guys suck big time we all know this......Im here for you. Call the cell to talk anytime.Love you

  • re del maledetto
    July 3, 2005
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    This was good. Nice form to it. Held together well. A nice grip on it and very nicely writen. Great write! Keep up the good work!!
    -Emcee

  • x PassionateKisses
    July 3, 2005
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    Whoaa.
    You are crazy.
    This is awesome!
    I have felt like this time & time before.
    But in the end, it all works out.
    There is someone out there for you!
    You might already know them, and just don't know it.
    But remember, I am always here for you.
    And always will be darlin'.
    Much love to ya!
    Love always,
    Shelby♥

  • pozo
    July 2, 2005
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    Aww, this is quite a good poem which I liked a lot Keep writing, this was wonderful
    All the best,
    Pozo


  • JonKohan
    July 2, 2005
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    this poem is so retarted it should be place in a class by it's self, is what i would have said if i read this poem and hated it which wasnt' the case here. sometimes the best stuff i write is when i just sit down and write how i feel or just write about something i think is stupid. i liked what you said in this poem and i enjoyed reading it alot.

    Arthur Is Dead


  • CountryLullaby
    July 1, 2005
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    thankx. im glad you like my poem!

  • LifesStranger
    July 1, 2005
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    it wasn't stupid...it made me feel warm and fuzzy. guys like that do exist, but usually they're either gay or taken...and that is very true. but it is all good. great job, love!

  • dephormed-schoolman
    June 30, 2005
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    great.

    i like this poem. but what i have to say is keep on wishing cause a wish may take time to come true. and if you give up on it then it may never come true. but this is a good poem.

  • Lotus Flower
    June 30, 2005
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    Me too! I want those things too! Great Job!

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